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  Jul 3 12, 10:17
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 2,085 Joined: 24-May 04 From: Time, Immoral Member No.: 66 Writer of: Poetry  |
10 T Tonka
Crazy Loo’s Diner I’ll ave a amber-grrr wit cheese, no junk, a chocolate shake an salad on de side. My friend is on de sofa over dere, an eel ave eggs fer breakfast, bona fide. I read de menu up beside da clock, dat pitcher from a real talented drawer. It make you mighty ungry seeing dat, an likely I’ll be back to ave some more! ·······  ······· |
  
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Jul 3 12, 15:40
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 Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
Dear Merlin,
Brilliant, tho I suspect you see it as a mere throwaway ! You have the accent and expressions jes righ .... Love Alan ······· ······· |
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Jul 4 12, 10:02
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 2,085 Joined: 24-May 04 From: Time, Immoral Member No.: 66 Writer of: Poetry |
Thank you Alan,
good to see you appreciate this bit of whimsy. You're right, it may end up in the junk drawer. I was playing around with the 10 words to see what they could muster up. Merlin ······· ······· |
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Jul 4 12, 15:37
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
Dear Merlin,
My contention is that it is NOT rubbish ! Love Alan ······· ······· |
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Jul 5 12, 06:07
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Very good, oh wizardry master!
 Enjoyed. -Cleo 
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Jul 5 12, 07:00
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 Greek Posts: 743 Joined: 3-February 09 From: Abingdon, Oxfordshire,UK Member No.: 754 Real Name: Leonora Wyatt Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:No one at all |
Hi Whizzy - Loved it! A big grin on a miz. day.
Your friend on de sofa over dere, might possibly prefer eggs fer is, 'brekfurst'? But who knows? Hugs, Leo ······· ······· |
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Jul 5 12, 10:05
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 2,085 Joined: 24-May 04 From: Time, Immoral Member No.: 66 Writer of: Poetry |
So good to see you all at the Diner!
Thanks for stopping in, ave a coffee whiles yer ere - on me! M ps Hi Leo, you're right, no doubt. I had to go back and make several changes, like picture to pitcher and others. ······· ······· |
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