 Eternity's Hazel Lark |
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| Guest_KnightWolf_* |
 Jun 4 05, 13:51
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Eternity’s Hazel Lark
Scarlet, sapphire, and saffron the sunset silks are With graceful velvet melodies the iris embrace And amid tendrils of rain my soul enrapture, As the lucid lunar fawn the marrow enshrouds. Copp’ry refrains descend as wisps of solar hair, Coos soothing her eb’ny eye dress cosmic regalia, Passion plaintive pools of Neptune’s star-milk splash Upon the lavender pale bodice of twinkling Orion. |
  
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| Guest_Nina_* |
Jun 4 05, 15:26
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Hi Knightwolf
You paint a vivid and sensual picture of dusk and the night sky, full of wonderful imagery. Passion plaintive pools of Neptune’s star-milk splash Upon the lavender pale bodice of twinkling Orion. I love these two lines especially. thanks for the read Nina |
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Jun 4 05, 17:51
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 1,547 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Jeddah, Saudi Arabia Member No.: 13 Real Name: Daniah Writer of: Poetry |
Knight,
This is so sensual and u paint an awesome image... I loved the closing line. Something about it just drew me in... Upon the lavender pale bodice of twinkling Orion. Incredible image. Dani ·······  ·······Happiness is a journey, not a destination.
"A good book is not read and forgotten. It lingers in the mind of the reader, reshaping thoughts, asking new questions, revisiting ancient ones." MM Award Winner     |
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| Guest_KnightWolf_* |
Jun 5 05, 00:14
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Thank you both very much, i am glad that you enjoyed it. It is different than what i usually write, but hey, lol, I can't complain. Have a wonderful day, and thanks again.
Nick |
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Jun 23 05, 05:15
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi KW.
 This is a very visual, colorful and sendsual piece that rounds nicely as couplets. The opening: Scarlet, sapphire, and saffron the sunset silks are With graceful velvet melodies the iris embrace and closing Passion plaintive pools of Neptune’s star-milk splash Upon the lavender pale bodice of twinkling Orion really sing.  I wish to be floating on the stars to enjoy this....Well done! ~Cleo  ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
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| Guest_Cathy_* |
Jul 11 05, 15:16
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This is beautiful Nick! I've read your works before and this
one is somewhat different but I like it a lot. I've seen your poems at Arcane Artistry and to be honest I had trouble understanding them. LOL Maybe it was just me! Anyway, this one is beautiful! Cathy |
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Jul 30 05, 09:00
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 Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 1,250 Joined: 2-August 03 From: USA Member No.: 7 Writer of: Poetry |
Hello KnightWolf~
A very imaginative piece filled with ethereal descriptions!  Great assonance too! Passion plaintive pools of Neptune’s star-milk splash Upon the lavender pale bodice of twinkling Orion. Nice! Blessings~ Lindi ······· ·······"Imagination is more important than knowledge and encircles the world"
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