Stargazer, Gold Award ~ Sonnet Options

[AMETHYST]

Stargazer-Sonnet # 1

Alone, she stands beneath a lambent scene,
in awe of distant stars that light her night.
Entranced by heaven's glow--her soul takes flight
to stroke his cheek and kiss his lips in dream.
Compelled by passion's stifled flame, she prays
to feel, just once, his warm embrace so near
and lay her head across his chest to hear
his beating heart and feel their bodies sway.
Between the earth and sky they live apart.
Two lovers longing Fate's firm hand to wave
and God to sanction life anew--to brave
a world without the bliss of destined hearts.


Two souls adrift…between the earth and time;
clandestine lovers caught in dreams divine.

[Cleo_Serapis]

Thank you for entry into "Odin's Opposition"!

Best of luck in the battle!

~Mosaic Musings Staff  :knight:

[Cleo_Serapis]

Congratulations on your Gold placement!

You have risen up, drank from the Well of Wisdom and have been crowned the ‘bringer of victory’!

Well done!
:pharoah2

[Guest_Jox_*]

Hi Liz,

Many, many congratulations on winning the competition with this excellent poem. Your achievement is especially worthy, considering the strong field of entries.

I really enjoyed reading this. Thank you very much.

James.

[Psyche]

Ooohhhhh, Liz, I simply love this sonnet !  :sun: Just my sort of thing, unattainable love, two souls destined to live apart. Could be that her lover is already dead, or perhaps it's a clandestine affair whereby they can only live their love as a dream?  Stargazing.....

It doesn't matter which, it's still absolutely beautiful and the different interpretations make it even more mystical, romantic & lovely.  

Congrats, Liz !!

Love,
Sylvia  :snail:  :turtle:

[AMETHYST]

Hey Lori,

Congratulations on your Gold placement!

You have risen up, drank from the Well of Wisdom and have been crowned the ‘bringer of victory’!  

Well done!

Thank you for the cup to drink from and the fullness of the well to quench the thirst! I am excited about the win here. Too excited for words and I thank you and the judges for such a compliment. It is an honor to be apart of the challenge and I know it wasn't an easy task with most of the entries most skillfully and masterly presented, I was completely beside myself

Hugs, Liz ...

[AMETHYST]

Hi James,

Hi Liz,

Many, many congratulations on winning the competition with this excellent poem. Your achievement is especially worthy, considering the strong field of entries.

I really enjoyed reading this. Thank you very much.

James.

Thank you James for wonderful honor and the encouraging words you give all year long. It is comments, feed back and inspiration that you and many other MM members give that keep the fuel on the fires of poetry for me. The entries were all each better than the next, so I can imagine only how difficult the process was and I am completely overwhelmed with gratitude and excitement at this moment.

I am glad you enjoyed that Sonnet. Actually it was my very first 'real' Sonnet. I am proud of it, but it is only as good as the people who have helped me through my learning of the craft.

Thank you and many big hugh hugs,

Liz

[AMETHYST]

 Oh Sylvia,

The poem is actually written with both those intentions in mind. My first and forever love of my heart passed away years ago, but even when he was alive, due to circumstance we were destined to be apart--and the poem was written to be able to relate to anyone who love's someone where their relationship has boundaries and obsticles that keep them from being together.

Which is probably anyone who has ever had a true first love! LOL

THank you for the praise, the encouragement and the kindness. I am both grateful and humbled by this news


Hugs, Liz

[Cybele]

Hi Liz,

Many congratulations on your victory in Odin's first Competition.

I find your poem almost too unbearably beautiful to read, since every word could relate to my own situtation. The loneliness and longing tug at my heart.

Strange that three poems dealt with death isn't it?

I have printed out  Stargazer and Sorrow to pin on the corkboard beside my computer to read whenever I feel the need.

Well done Liz, and thank you for the read.  :cloud9:

[Psyche]

Hi Liz !  :sun:

Although I'm very sorry to know that your first love passed away, which must have been indeed a terrible time for you, still I'm proud to have been able to read your poem both ways. Mainly because it's a truly beautiful sonnet and I read it several times, as I became more & more impressed by its dual possibilities... and now I'm even more impressed at finding out that you handled it so deftly, with those two readings in mind, linked to your own sad experience.

I find that writing from one's own experience works best, at least in my case.

Double congrats to you, Liz...  :cloud9:

Hugs,
Sylvia  :lovie:

[Psyche]

Hi Grace !  :sun:

Yes, the poems all deal with love, loss and death. But those are supposed to be the main themes of poetry and drama throughout the ages, apart from the humourists, of course. Can't get away from the first three topics, and I guess we need the humour to cope with it all. They're all an integral part of our lives, aren't they?

I'd already pinched Stargazer to gaze at whenever possible, and now I'll copy your idea of sticking all of the poems on my corkboard !

Hugs to you, Grace,
Sylvia  :lovie:

[Morgan le Fay]

Well Lizzie girl... Look what you've gone and done!  Big, Big congratulations on your Gold placement!!!!    :pharoah2

Liz, you may not know this, but you've always held such a special place in my poetic heart.  Ever since the early heady days of PK, I've admired your poetic skills, warm heart and generous spirit. I've so enjoyed watching and reading you grow, learn and express ever more skill in poetry these past years.  Your skills really shined in "Stargazer".  Exploding across my PC like the stars of the Milky Way.

Stargazer was a glorious example of a sonnet of the first order.  Beautiful work and very worthy of the Gold Award.  (can you tell I loved this piece?)  

Congratulations on your much deservered award.    Keep'em coming Liz!  

Love and stuff,
Chris :)

[AMETHYST]

Hi Liz,

Many congratulations on your victory in Odin's first Competition.

I find your poem almost too unbearably beautiful to read, since every word could relate to my own situtation. The loneliness and longing tug at my heart.

Strange that three poems dealt with death isn't it?

I have printed out  Stargazer and Sorrow to pin on the corkboard beside my computer to read whenever I feel the need.

Well done Liz, and thank you for the read.  

Hi Grace,

(Blushing ~ ) Thank you so very much. I have no idea what to say. Except that there isn't a greater gift than to know our works touch others and relate on a universal level and perhaps might be something readers will want to reread from time to time.

Yes, I notice that many poems posted recently relate to some loss or death of those close to us. I think the times are critical these days, and that everyone at some point has suffered a loss of a loved one and lean toward poetry as their choice of release... This poem came out a long time after the death of my childhood first love and during a flirtation ~ the only other person I had ever felt as much for as my first love, and yet, he turned out to be married and the poem seemed to combine the reaching for one love in heaven, while being drawn to someone who is right here and yet, just as distant.

Blessings to you and thank you so very, very much...I am beside myself.

Hugs, Liz

[AMETHYST]

Hi Liz !  

Although I'm very sorry to know that your first love passed away, which must have been indeed a terrible time for you, still I'm proud to have been able to read your poem both ways. Mainly because it's a truly beautiful sonnet and I read it several times, as I became more & more impressed by its dual possibilities... and now I'm even more impressed at finding out that you handled it so deftly, with those two readings in mind, linked to your own sad experience.

I find that writing from one's own experience works best, at least in my case.

Double congrats to you, Liz...  

Hugs,
Sylvia  

Hi Sylvia ...

First let me say thank you so much for your kindness and second, as I mentioned to Grace above, it thrills me to see that both connotations come through during the read as it was written with both senarios in mind. Both are fragments of my experience and they were being pulled and drawn in both directions.

Your feedback means the world to me to verify and confirm that this is truly what it has accomplished and this would be my most greatest success. Thank you.

Big hugs and so much gratitude! Hugs, Liz

[AMETHYST]

Well Lizzie girl... Look what you've gone and done!  Big, Big congratulations on your Gold placement!!!!    :pharoah2

Liz, you may not know this, but you've always held such a special place in my poetic heart.  Ever since the early heady days of PK, I've admired your poetic skills, warm heart and generous spirit. I've so enjoyed watching and reading you grow, learn and express ever more skill in poetry these past years.  Your skills really shined in "Stargazer".  Exploding across my PC like the stars of the Milky Way.

Stargazer was a glorious example of a sonnet of the first order.  Beautiful work and very worthy of the Gold Award.  (can you tell I loved this piece?)  

Congratulations on your much deservered award.    Keep'em coming Liz!  

Love and stuff,
Chris :)

Hey Chris,

I cannot begin to find the words to say thank you for the wonderful treasure of words you've given to me. This post is a gift in itself. I learned so much while on Poemkingdom, and Stargazer was technically my very first Sonnet I had ever written, of course, it grew into something worthy of submission with the valuable and worthy feedback, critique and suggestions of many poet friends. Without the help and encouragement of others, such as yourself I would still be sifting through with nonsensical and meaningless meanderings!  :dance:

It is a true treasure to hear these lovely thoughts from you and they bring back dear memories of good poetry friends made and honed over these years. I thank you for both of these gifts.

With all my heart, thank you... Best wishes, Liz

(And I adore your own works as well)

[Guest_Toumai_*]

Liz, this is a beautiful poem, and well-deserving of the award. Congratulations, and may your words continue to soar.  :sun:

FRan

[AMETHYST]

Hi Fran,

Thank you so much for your support and encouraging words.. This is one Sonnet dear to my heart and I am glad to be able to leave behind my words to my daughter and family through the winning award! I've been trying to focus my efforts to the chapbook and hope for any help when posting attentive poems for inclusion!

Thank you so much for your continuous support to help make our poetry here at MM, the best it can be! It is only through others that Stargazer, found its way to reaching its own potential. Not mine alone!

Blessing and love, Liz