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Sep 16 06, 16:42
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ETERNAL QUEST
Infinity; beyond reaching, yearning and searching constellations, galaxies, unnamed stars... Lost forever. Where, oh where?
Where, oh where? Forever lost. stars unnamed, galaxies, constellations... searching and yearning, reaching beyond Infinity.
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Sep 17 06, 06:07
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Hoooooooooooooooowwwwwwww are ya cobber. Hey, this is pretty cool. Why have ya gat at duck egg n' front of it. Be back
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Sep 17 06, 06:26
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I'm Back, O'k I broke a rule, a double bump. Ya can always deduct from the Wizard. Cause, I think this poem sgood. (feelin hungry) Half a mo while I go n' get some Sao's with marg n' Vegimite. Oh, ya still here Grace. I was lookn' for a poem with a reverse of words like, civic, level.minim, radar n' all that stuff. Ya know, like, 'Madam I'm Adam'. But, Buuuuuuuuut ya dood it with two verses. ETERNAL QUEST Infinity, beyond reaching, yearning and searching constellations, galaxies, unnamed stars. Lost forever. Where, oh where? Where, oh where? Forever lost. Stars unnamed, galaxies, constellations. Searching and yearning, reaching beyond Infinity I can't point out any mistakes, cause there isn't any. Very, very, good. What alovely poem Grace I'm overawed<<< (wrong) over awed. Fact awesome. Don't forget ta pop the cheque in tha postbox. YPFDO, jOHN
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Sep 17 06, 06:48
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Hi Grace.
I enjoyed this poem and the reversal you took with each line. The message of 'eternal quest' is well stated and each word builds upon the next. I'm not certain this is a Palindrome though, aren't they words or phrases spelled the same way backward and forward like mom, dad, madam?
I think you've just invented a new poetic form based on the forward/backward idea of Palindrome, but having the stanza content reverse order and word placement (like a twindrome)? I think this would look good centered too IMHO.
Infinity, beyond reaching, (suggest 'reach', instead of 'reaching') yearning and searching constellations, galaxies, unnamed stars. Lost forever. Where, oh where? (suggest 'adrift' instead of 'lost')
Where, oh where? Forever lost. (suggest 'adrift' instead of 'lost') Stars unnamed, galaxies, constellations. (remove endstop) Searching and yearning, reaching beyond (suggest 'reach', instead of 'reaching') Infinity (add endstop please)
Well done Grace! If you don't mind, could I try this too? ~Cleo
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Sep 17 06, 07:26
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QUOTE(Cleo_Serapis @ Sep 17 06, 11:48 ) [snapback]83485[/snapback] Hi Grace.
I enjoyed this poem and the reversal you took with each line. The message of 'eternal quest' is well stated and each word builds upon the next. I'm not certain this is a Palindrome though, aren't they are words or phrases spelled the same way backward and forward like mom, dad, madam?
I think you've just invented a new poetic form based on the forward/backward idea of Palindrome, but having the stanza content reverse order and word placement (like a twindrome)? I think this would look good centered too IMHO.
Infinity, beyond reaching, (suggest 'reach', instead of 'reaching') yearning and searching constellations, galaxies, unnamed stars. Lost forever. Where, oh where? (suggest 'adrift' instead of 'lost')
Where, oh where? Forever lost. (suggest 'adrift' instead of 'lost') Stars unnamed, galaxies, constellations. (remove endstop) Searching and yearning, reaching beyond (suggest 'reach', instead of 'reaching') Infinity (add endstop please)
Well done Grace! If you don't mind, could I try this too? ~Cleo
Hmmm... Not sure Lori, Palindrome (Gk 'running back again') A word or sentence (occasionally a verse) which reads the same way both ways. <<<The best known collection of verses was that produced by one Ambrose Pamperis in 1802. It consists of 416 palindromic verses recounting the campigns of Catherine the Great. NOOOoooooooooooooow That I'd like tooooooo see. He, he, all we have to doo now is search the web. That must have been one hell of a poem. He musta been a genious. Off goes ya head n' on goes a Ambrose Pamperis. See ya all later. John
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Sep 17 06, 08:11
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Grace, this was fun and interesting. In terms of its message, a little light weight, but clever nevertheless. Must try a few palindromes, serve better than a saduko. Cheers Gregory
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Sep 17 06, 08:50
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Hi Lori,
No this is not a Palindrome but a palindrome poem. An explanation follows.
Palindrome Poetry
Also Known as Mirrored Poetry
A palindrome, by definition, is a word, phrase, verse, sentence, or even poem that reads the same forward or backward.
It stems from the Greek word palindromos: palin, meaning again, and dromos, meaning a running. Combining the two together, the Greek meaning gives us, running back again...
Shown below are examples of the word-unit palindrome. The carefully placed words form the same sentence, whether it is read forward or backward. For example, 'Mirrored images reflect images mirrored' which includes a word in the center as a reversal point for the sentence or even the poem.
Example
Reflections by Lynee Fadden
Life- imitates nature, always moving, traveling continuously. Falling leaves placed delicately; foliage touching the echoing waters, clarity removed - Reflections distorted through waves rippling; gracefully dancing mirrored images - reflect - images mirrored. Dancing gracefully, rippling waves through distorted reflections - removed clarity. Waters echoing the touching foliage; delicately placed leaves falling - continuously traveling, moving always, nature imitates life
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Sep 17 06, 09:01
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Oh - isn't that nice! I was hoping it was! How lovely! Thanks for clearing me noggin' Grace. May I add your poem and definition to Karnak? Cheers ~Cleo
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Sep 17 06, 11:07
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G'day ta me Best Pommie Mucker,
'Ow's she goin' Arn? I hope yer health's better cobber, don't like ta think of yer as crook.
QUOTE Why have ya gat at duck egg n' front of it.
Are you referring to my lovely peony Sir?
QUOTE Cause, I think this poem sgood. (feelin hungry) Half a mo while I go n' get some Sao's with marg n' Vegimite.
Oh, ya still here Grace.
Don't mind me Arn, when ya gotta eat, ya gotta eat.
QUOTE I can't point out any mistakes, cause there isn't any
'Cor thanks Arn, much appreciated.
Now you just muster yer strength and get fit again mate.
Love to Pam an' Lily.
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Sep 17 06, 11:19
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Hello Lori,
I apologise for not finishing my reply to your crit, but I hade to take my son to the station to catch his train.
QUOTE I think this would look good centered too IMHO.
I agree Lori. Consider it done.
QUOTE Infinity, beyond reaching, (suggest 'reach', instead of 'reaching') yearning and searching constellations, galaxies, unnamed stars. Lost forever. Where, oh where? (suggest 'adrift' instead of 'lost')
Where, oh where? Forever lost. (suggest 'adrift' instead of 'lost') Stars unnamed, galaxies, constellations. (remove endstop) Searching and yearning, reaching beyond (suggest 'reach', instead of 'reaching') Infinity (add endstop please)
I particular wanted to use the 'ing' words to make this @of the moment' Lori.
I think I will keep 'lost' since it indicates that no matter what I do, I cannot find that which I seek. 'adrift' would indicate that it is floating around loose in the firmament and is still attainable.
As to the full stop. YES MA'AM. Thank you ma'am.
Certainly you can add the format to Karnak Lori.
Thank you so much for your input.
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Sep 17 06, 11:23
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Hello Gregory,
Nice to meet you.
QUOTE Grace, this was fun and interesting. In terms of its message, a little light weight, but clever nevertheless. Must try a few palindromes, serve better than a saduko.
Ye, I agree this is a little lightweight, but it is a very first attempt at the form. Hope I will do better in time.
I am useless at form poems normally (except haiku) but this is one I feel I could tackle.
As to Saduko ~ give me words any day!
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Sep 17 06, 18:48
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Hi Grace, What a beautiful poem! This is a new form for me... it seems to fit your poem perfectly. Your title fits as well. A never-ending search for... something, anything? Answers, happiness, knowledge, money, love.... *smiles* ETERNAL QUEST Infinity{,}[;] beyond reaching, yearning and searching constellations, galaxies, unnamed stars{.}[...] [l]ost forever. Where, oh where? Where, oh where? Forever lost. Stars unnamed, galaxies, constellations. Searching and yearning, reaching beyond Infinity. Of course, use or lose as you wish. Cathy
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Sep 18 06, 02:42
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Hi Cathy,
QUOTE What a beautiful poem! This is a new form for me
Me too Cathy but I really enjoyed writing it. Will definitely have another go!
QUOTE A never-ending search for... something, anything? Answers, happiness, knowledge, money, love....
Indeed, whatever the reader chooses it to be.
I Like your semi colon on line ! and have altered it.
As to the ellipses on line five, because this is a mirror image I would have to repeat them on L6.
One second thoughts perhaps that would add to the feeling of aimless searching. What do you think Cathy?
Ponder. Ponder.
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Sep 18 06, 02:45
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Just Popped in again. Wilkipedia has a section on Palindromes. Your poem is palindromic in the sense of the use of words rather than letters. Symmetry by words. Example. Fall leaves as soon as leaves fall. Where the hard part comes in is writing a stanza in word symmetry that makes sense. Then writing a second stanza in reverse that makes sense. That why I thought ya poem was Goodin' Feeling good Grace, thank you. John
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Sep 18 06, 03:20
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Sep 18 06, 19:06
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Hi Grace! QUOTE As to the ellipses on line five, because this is a mirror image I would have to repeat them on L6.
One second thoughts perhaps that would add to the feeling of aimless searching. What do you think Cathy? If you will notice you haven't used the exact punctuation in both verses so why worry about the elipsis? Not to mention the fact that as you said it would add to the feeling of aimless searching. I think they would work well on line 6. Cathy Infinity; beyond reaching, yearning and searching constellations, galaxies, unnamed stars. Lost forever. Where, oh where? Where, oh where? Forever lost. Stars unnamed, galaxies, constellations. Searching and yearning, reaching beyond Infinity.
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Sep 19 06, 02:31
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Good morning Cathy,
QUOTE If you will notice you haven't used the exact punctuation in both verses so why worry about the elipsis? Not to mention the fact that as you said it would add to the feeling of aimless searching. I think they would work well on line 6.
Yes, I see but I think this is one form where mirroring the punctuation is unnecessary, just the placement of the words.
I have put in the ellipses and I think it works perfectly. Thank you very much for the thought Cathy!
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Sep 19 06, 06:22
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QUOTE(Cybele @ Sep 19 06, 07:31 ) [snapback]83675[/snapback] Good morning Cathy,
QUOTE If you will notice you haven't used the exact punctuation in both verses so why worry about the elipsis? Not to mention the fact that as you said it would add to the feeling of aimless searching. I think they would work well on line 6.
Yes, I see but I think this is one form where mirroring the punctuation is unnecessary, just the placement of the words.
I have put in the ellipses and I think it works perfectly. Thank you very much for the thought Cathy!
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Sep 19 06, 08:14
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Hi Arniiiiiiiiiiieee,
QUOTE YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEeeeeeeeeeeeeeesh Grace
Ya new picture,
Is that ya bath water irrigating ya vegie patch.
Nah, that's me new swimmin' pool in the back garden Arn, like it?
It's actually the Isle of Seil on the west coast of Scotland. That's not a river but the Atlantic ocean that separates the Island from the mainland.
QUOTE Me picture's, down the road from me outlook to the northern escarpment.
I gathered that John from the lovely pitchers you sent me. Looks like there might be a poem in there somewhere cobber?
QUOTE Yeah, Yeah, I know I broke the rules Deduct from whatever, but ya gotta strike when the irons hot .
Well, I think Lori will forgive you ~ just this once Arn. (ya can get up off ya knees now ~ yer've grovelled enough.)
Gotta hop it now mate. See yer later me best ozzie mate.
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Sep 19 06, 17:49
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Simply a beautiful, well-thought-through reflection, Grace -- in both senses of the word. deLightful... Daniel
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