Sojourn ~ Quatrain Refrain, Form Created by me and named by Lori Kantor Options

[AMETHYST]

Another older Poem for last minute revisions -


********Revision 1 *****TY SUE AND SNOW ******

A candle quivers on the sill,
inviting travelers passing by
a welcome refuge from the chill,
and still no one has come inside.

At dusk, her kindled hearth is bright,
a coffee pot is freshly filled
and flakey biscuits served up right;
a candle quivers on the sill.

She sits and stares, as shadows dance
into the ebon evening sky,
in hopes her candle will entrance;
inviting travellers passing by.

It feels like winter never ends
for Beauty Belle has fallen ill,
and yet, she waits to offer friends
a welcome refuge from the chill.

Tonight, no dreams of love's embrace,
her breathless body's calm; Belle died.
No candle burns, no hearth, no grace...
and still no one has come inside.



Sojourn--Quatrain Refrain

A candle quivers on the sill,
inviting all who happen by.
Although so many pass at will,
the doorknob still has not been tried.

At dusk, the hearth is kindled bright,
a pot of coffee freshly filled,
and biscuits baked. Her wick ignites;
a candle quivers on the sill.

She sits and stares, as shadows dance
into the black of midnight sky,
in hopes her flicker will entrance;
inviting all who happen by.

The winter's wind has been no friend
to Beauty Belle, who's fallen ill.
She waits alone till evening's end,
although so many pass at will.

Tonight, no dreams of love's embrace,
her breathless body calm; Belle died.
No candle burns, no hearth, no grace...
the doorknob still has not been tried.

[AMETHYST]

Dear Sue,

Thank you for your help on this one - I hope you don't mind that I used most of your suggestions; they worked for my intentions perfectly. And I am so embarrassed that I for some reason, hadn't been able to see those little fumbles; such as " in hopes her flicker will entrance' it wasn't until you pointed it out that I had seen the twist of meaning.

I am so grateful you stopped by!

Big Hugs, Liz


Dearest Sue,

Thank you as well for your excellent suggestions, which I have also made use of and find the read is soooooo smooth and easily understandable. Please of course I am open to some feedback on the revision. Hoping it is working as wonderful as I am reading it! LOL

Love you both, LIz