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JustDaniel
post Jul 25 05, 09:43
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Tritina

The form of the Tritina is generally iambic pentameter, with three end-words (A,B,C) repeated and then enfolded in this manner:

A
B
C

C
A
B

B
C
A

A,B,C

It folds in on itself as a kind of mini-sestina.

Here's my first try:

The End of the Trail

I really don’t know how to write this form,
but challenge seems to always stir my pen,
so here I go again to blaze a trail…

though I may fail, and birds may eat this trail
of crumbs, or I may somehow misinform
the ones who come behind, end in the Pen…

intentional or not.  If so, my pen
I’d utilize at last to spill entrails
into sad lines I’d probably deform…

and chloroform from pen would end my trail.

© Daniel J Ricketts 25 July 2005


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post Jul 25 05, 10:00
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Dear Daniel,

Thank you for this ! I loved your summation line !

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Cleo_Serapis
post Jul 25 05, 10:11
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Cool form Daniel! cool.gif

Thank you for posting it!

So... the end words don't need to be EXACT then - but incorporated within it? Idea.gif

Cheers!
~Cleo sun.gif


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