Minute Options

[Aggiel]

THE MINUTE

It is  called  THE MINUTE  because it consists of 60 syllables.

Rhyme scheme :   aa , bb, cc , dd, ee, ff

meter : tetrameter and dimeter

It consists of three stanzas. Each stanza has 4 lines, making
a total of  12 lines.

Each stanza is a full sentence and ends with a full-stop.

It breaks into  4 lines of  :

line 1 tetrameter,
line 2  dimeter,
line 3 dimeter
line 4 dimeter.

or

SYLLABUS : 8444, 8444, 8444

EXAMPLE


                          Outside

                      I walk in stealth to catch the sight  
                        of  gulls  in flight
                        above the froth
                        with bated  breath.
                        Some spread their wings, a milky white
                       and start to fight
                        for bits of  plum
                        that smell  of  rum.                      
                        A  brook across the woody throngs,                    
                        reveals in songs
                        to passers-by
                       a bubbly sigh.        

                         Agatha Lai

                           2005

[Aggiel]

I did it again.  

Will someone help to change the title to

The Minute

Aggiel

[Guest__*]

Dear Aggie,

How's this ?

Love
Alan

THE MINUTE

The minute is a sight to see;
look here, with me,
first make a line
you're doing fine.

It should be of syllables eight
with metric weight,
then two of four,
this you'll adore.

All held within it's stanzas three
and you'll agree
you have poem,
that'll show 'em !

Alan McAlpine Douglas

[Guest_Toumai_*]

Very good Alan. Thanks for starting this thread, Aggiel - I love that poem (and I've changed the title)

Fran

[JustDaniel]

SUPER!

Thanks so much for starting the new tile and introducing this, Fran!  Here's my first backwoods shot:

Jest a Minute

I love new forms!  I’ll have to see
if brain cell’s free
to get the gist
and maybe twist
my thoughts into its lines a bit
an’ maybe wit’
a twinklin’ eye;
per’aps I’ll try
a note of seriousity
before I flee
from hissin’ boos
an’ take a snooze

© Daniel J Ricketts 12 May 2005

[Guest_Don_*]

Hi Just Daniel,

Yours is more formally correct as the whole is a single stanza.

Note that the subject is supposed to describe an event.  Yours flew over with levity wings.

Don

[JustDaniel]

Ah... then Don, you must have some inside information about this little gem of a form that has not yet been revealed!  An event, huh?  Could you set forth a link to a fuller explanation of this for us, perhaps?

I don't have time to offer a response in verse right now, but if I had more time before the home visit that I'm scheduled to make shortly, I would give it a shot.  But there is always another day... after you show us a bit more info.  Thank you so much for your assistance.

lookin' fer more Light, Daniel  :sun:

[Guest_Don_*]

Ah... then Don, you must have some inside information about this little gem of a form that has not yet been revealed!  An event, huh?  Could you set forth a link to a fuller explanation of this for us, perhaps?

I don't have time to offer a response in verse right now, but if I had more time before the home visit that I'm scheduled to make shortly, I would give it a shot.  But there is always another day... after you show us a bit more info.  Thank you so much for your assistance.

lookin' fer more Light, Daniel  

Hi Just Daniel,

I e-mailed you the whole picture of my knowledge. The source is from my copy of "How to Write Poetry" by Lee Ann Russell. The group Bards of a Feather to which I belong extracts most of our monthly projects from this non-traditionally published book.

I wrote a minute that won a first place award.  No one understands it; therefore, this mention hopefully will suffice.  

Don

[Aggiel]

Thanks a lot. Fran. You are most helpful.

Aggiel

[JustDaniel]

Thanks, Don!  I'll get my email late tonight, I hope... but I'm going straight from work to a meeting and won't be back till around 10 pm, so this is the only story I can tell at the moment:

Don tried to help me understand —
intentions grand —
but didn’t know
that mail won’t show
on my PC at work… would take
my whole darned break…
and I won’t fake
an alibi, so I’ll just share
my story where
he’ll sooner read
why I can’t heed.

Lightly, Daniel  :sun:

[Aggiel]

THE MINUTE

The minute is a sight to see;
look here, with me,
first make a line
you're doing fine.

It should be of syllables eight
with metric weight,
then two of four,
this you'll adore.

All held within it's stanzas three
and you'll agree
you have poem,
that'll show 'em !

Alan McAlpine Douglas

It's spontaneous and free. I have enjoyed it, Alan.

Thanks for sharing.

Aggiel

[Aggiel]

Jest a Minute

I love new forms!  I’ll have to see
if brain cell’s free
to get the gist
and maybe twist
my thoughts into its lines a bit
an’ maybe wit’
a twinklin’ eye;
per’aps I’ll try
a note of seriousity
before I flee
from hissin’ boos
an’ take a snooze

© Daniel J Ricketts 12 May 2005

A great job, Daniel. What a jest ! Thanks for sharing.

Aggiel

[Aggiel]

Hi Don,

Why not share  your winning minute here .

All the best

Aggiel

[Cleo_Serapis]

Hi Aggie.

Thanks so much for posting this poetic form here in Karnak!  

I've never heard of this form but I can guarantee you that it'll personally take me more than 60 seconds (and maybe even 60 minutes) to write one of these little gems.    

It's refreshing to see the discussions from your poem in Herme's  continued in such detail with the notable desire to share with our members.

I WILL be back to post this uniquel refreshing form soon.

Thanks so much Aggie - you are a sweetie!  

~Cleo  :pharoah2

[Cleo_Serapis]

Ah... then Don, you must have some inside information about this little gem of a form that has not yet been revealed!  An event, huh?  Could you set forth a link to a fuller explanation of this for us, perhaps?

I don't have time to offer a response in verse right now, but if I had more time before the home visit that I'm scheduled to make shortly, I would give it a shot.  But there is always another day... after you show us a bit more info.  Thank you so much for your assistance.

lookin' fer more Light, Daniel  

Hi Just Daniel,

I e-mailed you the whole picture of my knowledge. The source is from my copy of "How to Write Poetry" by Lee Ann Russell. The group Bards of a Feather to which I belong extracts most of our monthly projects from this non-traditionally published book.

I wrote a minute that won a first place award.  No one understands it; therefore, this mention hopefully will suffice.  

Don

Hi Daniel.

Only going by Aggie's description of this form above, it appears that each stanza must have an end-stop:

It consits of three stanzas of 12 lines. Each stanza is a sentence with a full-stop at the end.

Does that help?

~Cleo

[Cleo_Serapis]

In Light Thereof

O’ starry night that you reveal
intense appeal
white monomer;
astronomer.

That I could be at one with thee
in pallid sea
of hydrogen
and morphogen.

I’d beam through universal rays
and count the days
of blessed love;
in light thereof.

© Lorraine M Kanter

[Aggiel]

Hi Aggie.

Thanks so much for posting this poetic form here in Karnak!  

I've never heard of this form but I can guarantee you that it'll personally take me more than 60 seconds (and maybe even 60 minutes) to write one of these little gems.    

It's refreshing to see the discussions from your poem in Herme's  continued in such detail with the notable desire to share with our members.

I WILL be back to post this uniquel refreshing form soon.

Thanks so much Aggie - you are a sweetie!  

YES, I KNOW..

~Cleo  :pharoah2

Hi Lori,

Thanks for being so appreciative. I was a request from Justdaniel
and I gladly obliged. I am so happy to see so many instant  responses,
which throw  a light on my understanding of this great group of poets
I am with, considering the lentgh of time I took to complete my poem.

Thanks again.

Aggiel

[Aggiel]

In Light Thereof

O’ starry night that you reveal
intense appeal
white monomer;
astronomer.

That I could be at one with thee
in pallid sea
of hydrogen
and morphogen.

I’d beam through universal rays
and count the days
of blessed love;
in light thereof.

© Lorraine M Kanter

Lori,

This is beautiful.  :cheer:


Thanks for sharing.

Aggiel

[JustDaniel]

See how difficult it is for me to follow directions!?  BUT... once I figure them out, the fun begins!  Thanks for showing me the obvious, Lori... the part that I usually miss!

sLightly embarrassed (but what's new?!) Daniel  :speechless:

[ArtesiaMeeks]

Aggie,

A cute poem....I enjoyed reading it.

ArtesiaMeeks