Reflections of Mortality, inspired by the W. Wordsworth Challenge Options

[Guest__*]

The mountains raise their heads and feel
the gentleness of Heaven on their brow.
They ponder how most sweet it is, unreal,
so distant from the touch of earthly ‘now’.

Pure as the naked snow that lines their breast,
for transient sorrows cannot linger here,
and so the grandeur rises to the test;
To banish every vestige of a tear.

I wandered lonely, once, and could not find
a hint of inspiration on a theme;
Until a violet, by a slope inclined,
brought fresh and gentle solace to my dream.

For in these hills, immensely hewed from stone,
The Lord looked down and sowed a tiny flower.
One isolated gem to call His own,
a symbol of Humility and Power.


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[Cleo_Serapis]

Absolutely beautiful Tom!  :pharoah2

Have you posted this one in the challenge as well? If not, I DO hope you will!

Love this:
"I wandered lonely, once, and could not find
a hint of inspiration on a theme;
Until a violet, by a slope inclined,
brought fresh and gentle solace to my dream."

Write on!

~Cleo  :lovie:

[Guest__*]

OK.So I posted it to mild critique.

hugz

Tom


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[JustDaniel]

Words worth reading, Ancient Rhymemaster!

Now please instruct me on your use of capitalization following (.  Is it a UK phenomenon?

sLightly confused (as usual), Daniel  :upside:

[Guest__*]

Hi Daniel
Punctuation in Poetry is Personal.
How's that for alliteration.

Sometimes a poem is capitalised at the start of each line without using periods.
Each line stands by itself to form an integral part of the entire piece.

Sometimes a line follows straight through into the next line without a pause or comma in sight. This is enjambment.

Sometimes a semi colon can be used instead of a comma to create a more significant pause. (Better and tidier than ellipses,) e.g. a caesura.

Inversely, sometimes a semi colon can be used to ease into the next statement without the jarring finality of a full stop. We finished saying this; But this has some connection with that. Yes?


Punctuation simply sets the flow of the poem. When a sentence stops, it's no big deal to omit a period. The main objective is to set the flow and state your piece clearly and simply. Did this poem achieve that? If it did, then I'm happy with it.

If you read the masters, you will see what I mean

Tom
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[Guest_codger_*]

Tom,
     This was pure magic--I loved it.  

     I liked your response too, I tried to write a reply about not being too
     pedantic in poetry, or even prose---But I did not put it quite as
     elloquently as you did    


     Gerry/codger.

[LadyEvergreen865]

Magical and inspirational! Beautifully done! Love this one....Elaine

[jgdittier]

Dear Tom,
beautifullu put. the serenity and the cadence both flow without a ripple and the thoughts about the impact of one tiny violet on a mighty mountain range...
Cheers,     jgd