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Nov 12 03, 02:25
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mirrors
wakened, squinting eyes’
vengeful mourning reflection
getting back at me
© Daniel J Ricketts 12 Nov 2003
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Nov 30 03, 08:48
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unmourned, with throats cut on the fresh-mown Summer lawn murdered daisies lie
Grace
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Nov 30 03, 13:00
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How un-Graceful, Cybele!
poetic just is
stirring in your wake as you chuckle off to bed is pay-back enough
©M Lee Dickens’ son 30 Nov 2003
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Dec 1 03, 08:29
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on the log cabin ice crystals hanging from eaves rainbowed by the sun
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Dec 1 03, 14:00
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jack’s flap house crystal
in jack’s Log Cabin crystallized maple syrup wreaked havoc on pour
© Daniel J Ricketts 01 Dec 2003
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Dec 6 03, 03:41
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my head tilted back to catch raindrops on my cheeks end of Summer’s drought
Grace
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Dec 18 03, 18:10
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Hi, Grace! Lovely, indeed!
When you posted this, I was painfully suffering through my last day at the hospital on the CPM machine... with a newly discovered bed sore... and twelve hours later was transferred to the rehab hospital.
I'd love to have been able to read you poem then. I love summer rain! Thank you.
past the bend
running was my bent… such pressure… fell to my knees; limped through Guide’s strait gait
© Daniel J Ricketts 18 Dec 2003
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Dec 19 03, 01:17
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Dec 19 03, 02:34
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Dear Grace
Quite lovely !
Lets see if I can respond :
WHIMPERS
Summer slinks away hidden by autumnal mist unseen, unnoticed
Autumn, fading, hides its many hues and colours : blanketed, banked, blanked.
Shush, speak not of slush; winter's end fills busy drains, green springs sprout afresh
Spring's dated newness fades, all cloaked by greenery; Earth, primed, produces .....
Grace Galton (verse 1) Alan McAlpine Douglas (verses 2-4)
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Dec 19 03, 03:13
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Good Morning Alan,
Great response!
WHIMPERS
Summer slinks away hidden by autumnal mist unseen, unnoticed
Autumn, fading, hides its many hues and colours : blanketed, banked, blanked.
Shush, speak not of slush; winter's end fills busy drains, green springs sprout afresh
Spring's dated newness fades, all cloaked by greenery; Earth, primed, produces .....
a Summer meadow dappled with blood red poppies where the skylarks rise
Grace Galton (verse 1 and 5) Alan McAlpine Douglas (verses 2-4)
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Dec 19 03, 03:42
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Hi Grace,
unmourned, with throats cut on the fresh-mown Summer lawn murdered daisies lie
I'm with you! (I don't mow interesting flowers out).
All these veggies and tidy gardeners massacring all the plants.
Anyway, a jolly good Haiku 'twas - and back to the original Japanese theme of nature.
on the log cabin ice crystals hanging from eaves rainbowed by the sun
Lovely, pastoral and very evocative.
my head tilted back to catch raindrops on my cheeks end of Summer’s drought
Great for today's murky day... good job we can share it; I'm tempted to let Daniel have it for his pains (Hi Daniel! Welcome back) but I don't need to... you've given it to us all. Thank you.
1976 - I remember it well - we called in native American shamen to dispel the heat and encourage the rain. What a terrible Summer! I love saunas - but I also love to step out of them.
And yet another fine poem!
Some other excellent poems on here from Daniel and Alan and others but I think yours strike especially true for me, Grace. Absolutly fantastic!
Well done to all.
James.
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Dec 26 03, 12:19
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Agreeing with James' assessment...
we now move from the sublime to the ridiculous:
lashed words in tasty mint
‘tis grace to right wrongs but graceless to write them down; wronged rite ~ o bit tongue
© M Lee Dickens’ son 26 Dec 2003
offered Lightly, Daniel
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Jan 11 04, 05:06
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still wrapped in your love tears dry on my cheeks, pain salved; hold me forever
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Jan 11 04, 05:32
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Dear Grace
Loved the haiku, and can respond with a few on the same subject, very much with you and Ralph in mind .....
Still, rapt in our love, my cheeks tearless, salvation holds us forever.
Though flesh will perish, the glowing raptures we know cannot be ruptured.
From beyond the grave, there's levity in your voice; I know your laughter .....
Physically gone : gravity may own your bones; I've the real you, still .....
Love Alan
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Jan 11 04, 06:08
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Good Sir Knight
Thank you for your empathy and beautiful, responsive haiku, I have saved them to read whenever I need to.
20th December 2003
gold- rimmed clouds today; the last perfect sky we see together my love
Love
Grace
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Jan 14 04, 03:40
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albino badger viewed in a floodlit garden; crunches ginger nuts
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Jan 16 04, 21:34
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if you'll pardon an askew senryu...
painting outside…
the yellow paint dries arcing in dots from the lane where I’d passed line truck
© M Lee Dickens’ son 16 Jan 2004
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Jan 17 04, 02:26
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Good Morning Daniel,
A very vivid picture indeed. I assume these are the central road lines dividing lanes? Ours are white,yellow being reserved for No Parking areas.
Millie the farm horse her big brown eyes begging me; any mints today?
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Jan 17 04, 08:56
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Warm sun glistens frost on a brisk morning of hope; Can you feel the air?
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