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 Aug 25 07, 12:46
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 18,591 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori  |
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statuesque lady has monumental success... in-ported French toast © MLee Dickens'son 25 Aug 2007 was "imported" This post has been edited by JustDaniel: Aug 29 07, 18:31 ·······  ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Aug 26 07, 15:17
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 Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 376 Joined: 28-May 07 From: Co. Galway, Ireland Member No.: 440 Real Name: Terry O C Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Ephiny |
QUOTE (JustDaniel @ Aug 25 07, 18:46 )  woeman's lib icon statuesque lady has monumental success... imported French toast © MLee Dickens'son 25 Aug 2007 Hey Daniel, HaHa, nice one. The only bit I'm not sure of is the ...French toast, don't get me wrong I have it for breakfast all the time but that statue and toast, whats the link? Both imports from france or ....?? Suggest "imported French tart" Now I'm D'lightin in the exchange  . ······· ·······Terry
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Aug 26 07, 17:22
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,591 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Hey, Terry...
just remember that EACH PART -- the title and each of the two snapshots -- either IS or CONTAINS a play on words... thus the last line has a dual meaning... as does the title... and the snapshot of lines one and two... EACH of them! Once you get one or all of them it will stand out like the _ _ _ _ _ _ in _ _ _ / _ _ _ _ / _ _ _ _or. Lightin' the way... Daniel 
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Aug 27 07, 04:31
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 Assyrian Posts: 271 Joined: 21-July 07 From: somewhere twixt 'n' tween Member No.: 456 Real Name: Sam Richmond Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:N/A |
Morning Daniel;
I agree that many 'harbor' great respect for this beautiful lady. Love your ku and your tribute. Sam ······· ······· Values are to integrity as spirit to spirituality ... the one is needed that the other is sustained ~ Sam
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Aug 27 07, 05:35
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,591 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Thank you very much, Sam... and you're right. Indeed we do!
deLightingly, Daniel
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Aug 28 07, 03:38
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
QUOTE (JustDaniel @ Aug 25 07, 18:46 ) woeman's lib icon statuesque lady has monumental success... inported French toast © MLee Dickens'son 25 Aug 2007 was "imported" Hi Daniel -- I'm feeling dim this morning, why have you changed to 'inported'? Snow 
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Aug 28 07, 09:15
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,591 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Good to see you, Snow!!
I just thought it would add the suggestion mentioned above: She was ported into the port from France, ya know! My revision can be just as easily changed back to the original; I'm looking for suggestions and reactions to help me 'fix' this. Your help and observations are always valuable to me. Lightly, Daniel
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Aug 29 07, 04:33
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Mosaic Master Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
QUOTE (JustDaniel @ Aug 28 07, 15:15 ) Good to see you, Snow!! I just thought it would add the suggestion mentioned above: She was ported into the port from France, ya know! My revision can be just as easily changed back to the original; I'm looking for suggestions and reactions to help me 'fix' this. Your help and observations are always valuable to me. Lightly, Daniel Hi Daniel I think either word would be acceptable, but inport might make the reader think its a typo (as I did originally) Great play on words from you as usual Daniel. Snow
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Aug 29 07, 06:24
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Assyrian Posts: 271 Joined: 21-July 07 From: somewhere twixt 'n' tween Member No.: 456 Real Name: Sam Richmond Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:N/A |
Standing statute...
seeking lady lib harbor no hesitation go off the depend ······· ······· Values are to integrity as spirit to spirituality ... the one is needed that the other is sustained ~ Sam
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Aug 29 07, 18:34
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,591 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
QUOTE (Eisa @ Aug 29 07, 05:33 ) I think either word would be acceptable, but inport might make the reader think its a typo (as I did originally) I think you're right! I've inserted a hyphen. Thanks Great play on words from you as usual Daniel. ~ Snow Thank you again, Snow. deLighting in the exchange, Daniel
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Aug 29 07, 18:38
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,591 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
QUOTE (4rum @ Aug 29 07, 07:24 ) Standing statute... seeking lady lib harbor no hesitation go off the depend That is a good riposte, my friend. Why not post it either separately or in Karnak and we can discuss it... where our responses can be discussed more deependably and where no one will harbor any hesitation about violating necessary statutes in pursuit of liberty of speech within the appropriate confines of the center of commerce here... Lightly, Daniel
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Aug 30 07, 03:26
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Mosaic Master Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
QUOTE (JustDaniel @ Aug 30 07, 00:34 ) QUOTE (Eisa @ Aug 29 07, 05:33 ) I think either word would be acceptable, but inport might make the reader think its a typo (as I did originally) I think you're right! I've inserted a hyphen. Thanks Great play on words from you as usual Daniel. ~ Snow Thank you again, Snow. deLighting in the exchange, Daniel Great idea Daniel -- your intent is much clearer now. Snow
······· ·······Live one day at a time -it's simpler that way.
Laugh loud & often - it's medicinal. Write from the heart - it's therapeutic. Beauty comes from within - the outer is just skin! Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here! MM Award Winner |
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Aug 31 07, 10:07
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,591 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Thanks again, Snow. I had not been happy with it even before your comment, but your words made me look at it closer, for which I'm appreciative.
deLighting in sharing, Daniel
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