 The Dangers Of Darkness, Odin III ~ Merit |
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| Guest_Cathy_* |
 Apr 6 06, 11:43
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 approx. 300 words The Dangers Of Darkness Dalton reached out and couldn't see his hands in the dense gloom. He was trying hard to control his urge to scream as the deepening shadows swallowed him. A cloying odor stung his nostrils, filling his throat with bile; he had to fight not to be sick. The clinging air reeked with a sadness that he couldn't understand. Not knowing where he was, he was afraid to move and just as afraid to be caught standing still. An ache filled his heart and body as his tainted vision began to clear. My god, was this ... Hysteria rose within him as the space ahead took on a scarlet-hued glow. Surging illusions, cloaked in icy-cold, pushed at him from the rear, slowing his actions. Figures began to emerge from the darkness, making their way through tangible webs. Dalton's hystrionics were frozen in his throat. Simultaneously he felt torrid heat from the reddened mist ahead and iciness from the melancholia at his back. Transparent spectres infiltrated the apparition, eeriely promising extinction. They drifted aimlessly through his mind. Feelings of desperation and despair cut sharply through the thickness of gothic depression to Dalton's core. They wanted his soul! His feet were heavy, as though implanted in the ground. Devastation began to embrace him, determined to follow ... but follow what? His flesh turned frigid in the moist ambience, as did his mind. Blood began to flow from nowhere in red-hazed streaks, reaching out for him! A sparkling white cloud invaded the shadows, offending and dispelling them. Serenity was consuming the sadness while the bloody flow was staunched right before his eyes. Suddenly there was a sword in his hand and his fight returned. Now prepared to do battle he valiantly began slicing through the rapidly retreating darkness, stilling the shrieks of insanity. Cathy Bollhoefer copyright April2006 |
  
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Apr 6 06, 12:04
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Thank you for your entry into Odin's Opposition! :troy:
Perhaps you’ll rise up, drink from the Well of Wisdom and be crowned the ‘bringer of victory’? Best of luck in the battle! :vic: ~Mosaic Musings Staff  ·······  ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner           |
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May 20 06, 08:44
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Congratulations on your Merit placement!
 You have risen up, drank from the Well of Wisdom and have been crowned the ‘bringer of victory’!   Well done! 
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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| Guest_Jox_* |
May 20 06, 09:07
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Hi Cathy,
Very well done with your merit-placement in Odin's. :) You have a brace of winners! J. |
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| Guest_Cathy_* |
May 20 06, 09:59
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Thanks Lori, James!
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| Guest_Nina_* |
May 20 06, 11:53
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Hi Cathy (again
 )Congratulations on your merit for this story, so different from your other one. Nina |
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| Guest_Cathy_* |
May 20 06, 15:12
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Thanks Nina! LOL It was a bit different wasn't it?
 Cathy |
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May 23 06, 06:03
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Ornate Oracle  Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr |
Cathy,
Congratulations once again. All of your submissions to Odin's were extremely well written, but there was something about this one that intriqued me the most. Thanks for sharing your gift of story-telling with us. JLY ······· ·······Give thanks for your new friends of today, but never forget the warm hugs of your yesterdays.
Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner     |
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| Guest_Cathy_* |
May 25 06, 07:31
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Thanks John! LOL I wasn't sure this one would appeal to anyone!
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