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Nov 2 03, 10:34
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Mosaic Master
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Hi all. YEP - here I go again! :)
I thought it might be fun to try and use several of Sylvia Plath's Poetry snippets and form a new poem using partial lines from her various poems.
I will supply the lines. You can use them as the beginning of a line or mix them up as long as the snippets remain intact. Good luck!
Here are the snippets you must use in your poem (in any order). Feel free to rhyme or write free verse or any other type of poetry style to your liking! There are 12 snippets. You must use at least 8.
Cheers and good luck!
~Cleo :pharoah:
a botanical drawing Riding the rip tide your nakedness shadows our safety The light burns Under the eyes of the stars Flowers and bluebirds a glitter of seas Contemplating a world a wave of flickering grass in a dawn of cornflowers frail as the halo Each wedge wears
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Nov 2 03, 10:39
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Mosaic Master
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Whimsical Warriors
Under the eyes of the stars, whimsical warriors wield reflected tidings of twilight.
The light burns brilliantly. Lustful lips inhibit lingering oceans of obscure optimism.
Respite comes riding the rip tide on a glitter of seas amassing laurels of luminosity.
Flowers and bluebirds feast on fare savored by gatherings of gregarious lovers as frail as the halo itself.
In a dawn of cornflowers, we gaze at a botanical drawing of divine devotion, unbound by banquets of bondage.
In a wave of flickering grass, we play a part, contemplating a world full of whimsical warriors.
Each wedge wears ecstasy without limitation. In this empire, your nakedness shadows our safety.
© 2003 Lorraine M Kanter
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Nov 3 03, 21:46
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Anew
Riding the riptide, our thoughts askew, dreams not fulfilled Each wedge wears anew.
The light burns, no longer bright, our love, less each day, frail as the halo's plight, Contemplating a world of dismay.
In its own infinite way, as now, your nakedness shadows our love. I don't ask, why, or how it's just you.. that I think of.
Under the eyes of the stars can’t we see this through, be left without any scars? Only one, I want to pursue.
A glitter of seas, our only hope, like a wave of flickering grass, lives, not a slippery slope, in a dawn of cornflowers, love shall pass.
Like a botanical drawing, in its glory lives together once more, flowers and bluebirds, our love story, to the clouds of heaven, it will soar.
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Nov 5 03, 05:24
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UNIVERSE-SHATTERING PLATHITUDES (Satire)
Contemplating a world unknown to me, say a botanical drawing, or those of flowers and bluebirds, I'm riding the rip tide of my dullish ignorance.
The light burns feebly through a glitter of seas; a wave of flickering grass on the mist-tossed shore resolving in a dawn of cornflowers under the eyes of the stars fast fading now.
The partial moon indeed seems made of cheese as each wedge wears a wrapper waxed not "Eden", but "Edam", frail as the halo of a waning sun, while your nakedness shadows our safety
to my bitter end .....
Alan McAlpine Douglas
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Jan 26 04, 20:55
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Mosaic Master
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Nice you two!
I hadn't read these until now - silly me!
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Jun 25 05, 09:01
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Dear All,
Lori's recent post has Unspired me (spelling deliberate) to write my version of Plath :
A LAST BOUQUET OF DRIED-UP FLOWERS (Sylvia Plath phrases used : contemplating a world; your nakedness shadows our safety; the light burns; under the eyes of the stars; flowers and bluebirds; a glitter of seas; riding the rip tide; a botanical drawing; a wave of flickering grass; frail as the halo; in a dawn of cornflowers)
Contemplating a world without your nakedness, shadows, our safety goggles, the light burns under the eyes of the stars, all flowers and bluebirds, within a glitter of seas riding the rip tide.
A botanical drawing of a mandarin, faced in orange, hued not dissimilar to a baboon’s butt, where each wedge wears a wave of flickering grass within my meandering, frail as the halo on a Botticelli postcard mind, I come, prepared to end it all, serenely, in a dawn of cornflowers blue ....
Alan McAlpine Douglas
PS I bet I make as much sense as the originals. I hope I am not treading on the toes of any Plath-lovers (Ted Hughes excepted), but if I am, I wish I could genuinely say I'm sorry ! )
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Jun 25 05, 10:29
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Hi Alan
I'm not going to attempt to crit this. I love the baboon butt line - very amusing.
Nina
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Jun 25 05, 10:50
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Hi Alan,
Well done, J.
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Jun 25 05, 15:12
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Alan, you are irreverent to the last. btw, it's mandrills that have the bright posteriors. (What d'y'mean, this isn't a crit forum?).
Love, Fran
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Jun 25 05, 19:15
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Mosaic Master
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Here it is Alan (it was on page 2 with most of the other snippet challenges).
I've merged your post into this one as the se challeges are to be a 'add reply' ....
Well done! ~Cleo
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Jan 25 16, 19:42
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Sylvia Plath Snippets
Monterey Memories
A glitter of seashells once lined the beach like swimmers, who were riding the rip tide onto the sand. The waters could not reach a wave of flick’ring grass that grew beside
the fragile dunes of sand; for each wedge wears a crown, frail as the halo ‘round the moon. Like a botanical drawing that shares an artist’s mind. The light burns like it’s noon
while I was contemplating a world view of flowers and bluebirds. Still, ocean’s laid their tongues upon the coast; an endless queue. Yet, in a dawn of cornflowers I stayed.
Your nakedness shadows our safety’s shore under the eyes of stars we can’t ignore.
Snippets used in order of appearance: a glitter of seas, riding the rip-tide, a wave of flickering grass, each wedge wears, frail as a halo, a botanical drawing, the light burns, contemplating a world, flowers and bluebirds, a dawn of cornflowers, your nakedness shadows our safety, under the eye of the stars
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