January 2007 IBPC Nominations, IBPC Nominations for February comp Options

[AMETHYST]

Winter's Bed By Snow


I would like to begin nominations for January's IBPC competition submissions. And to start it off, Snow has posted a lovely winter poem. The poem offers the reader both a wonderful array of sounds that please the reader, while she has included lovely visuals to enhance the descriptions. She has stumbled over some very fresh and unique ways to describe an old and overly done image... Snowflakes and winter...

I think she really put a strong step forward with this...

Hugs, Liz

Winter dawns as snowflakes
.s
......p
...........i
.........l
.............l
from yawning skies
like delicate lace doilies
.d
.....r
.......i
........f
.....t
.........i
......n
...g

.....d
...o
......w
.........n
blanketing the earth's grassy mattress
in a flurry of shimmering sheets.

The temperature
.t
......u
...m
.......b
..........l
.......e
...........s
scattering frosted spangles, to glisten the quilt
pillowing terra firma, for Winter's quiescence.

[AMETHYST]

I would like to nominate These Hands By Cyn as it is written with raw straight forward honesty. Gripping truths of a man's life that, perhaps is a no body in the grand scheme of things, but how Cyn used the voice chosen, word choices and various experiences to link one event to the other brought about a unity between the narrator and the reader. I felt she used several poetic devices so skillfully that the poem sat with me, and I with it.

Good poem to read.

Hugs, Liz

These Hands

When’d they get so old lookin’, he wondered, these same hands
that built this house. A saw took this ring finger

clean off, hardly bled at all. These same hands, before they were all
bent and peculiar, tilled these fallow fields, barren as the missus,

before the cancer took her, after Doc White took her ovaries and the chemo
took her hair. Looked jess like a baby bird, she did. Like this fledgling mewling

in these hands, its wing bent and lifeless, mangled foot clasping nothing.
The shovel blade against its neck, it hardly bled at all.

[Cyn]

Thank you, Liz, for such high praise and for the nomination

[AMETHYST]

Hey Cyn,

It is a great poem! :) Good luck!

Hugs, Liz

[Guest_Cathy_*]

Very realistic Cyn! I'm sure in one way or another most of us could relate to this.

Congratulations and good luck~

Cathy

[Guest_Cathy_*]

I love the images you've created and as Liz has already said... you did it in a unique way.

Congratulations and good luck~

Cathy

[Eisa]

Thank you Liz and Cathy

Snow

[Eisa]

I would like to nominate this rictameter by Merlin for its originality -- wonderful word choice and especially for this unique format.



Full moon
and starlight glow,
you reappear once more
like ghosts from long ago. A smile;
we touch, caress, I stroke your hair. We love.
When morning sprinkles lavender
across this purple plain,
you disappear,
full moon.

Perhaps
it's not a dream.
Your perfume lingers while
one naughty star stays put to wink
at me; it's like some harlequin up high
whose escapade on heaven's stair
lets stardust flakes cascade.
Sweet melodies,
perhaps.

Red haze
disguises fields
and fabled hills as dawn
awakes. She brings veracity
in crystal drops of primal rainbow dew,
reciting bead by bead from one
enchanted, endless string.
Then sunrise fades
red haze.

[JustDaniel]

I second that, for all of the above!

deLightingly, Daniel

[AMETHYST]

Excellent choice. The form Rictameter is used at its best within this presentation. Wonderful work ... Eric Congratulations on the Nomination, well deserving!

[Guest_Cathy_*]

I think I like this poem more each time I read it Eric! The imagery is just beautiful... your word choices are perfect!

Congratulations and good luck!

Cathy

[Guest_Don_*]

I second Daniel's second.

An outstanding choice.

Don

[AMETHYST]

I would like to nominate "Midnight Odyssey" The imagery and sonics through out are brilliant. The story is fresh, original and enchanting ...

Hugs, Liz


Midnight Odyssey

White dragon flies black velvet skies on silver star-kissed wing,
hop-scotching cotton clouds so soft to spark a twilight fling.
While soaring 'cross the heavens high he drifts near Luna Moon;
he'll serenade her with a sigh... sweet lullaby to croon.

The fairie queen stands regally on wispy cirrus white,
her layered skirts a-shimmering with lunar lucent light.
Caress of cheek from silken hair afloat on warmest breeze,
obscures the smile upon her face... she glances shy to tease.

Her ivory carriage glides up near, a twinkle in his eye,
and offers her a pleasured flight across the starry sky.
With graceful ease she climbs his wing to perch atop his back,
delighting in fantasial sights through spheres of dapple-black.

Free-flying on those gentle winds, bestirring mists bordeaux,
astride her gem-toned dragon's neck with smiling face aglow,
they're seeking thrills with Nanna star who reigns supreme above ...
then richly blend their voice as one to sing of Ladylove.

Their glistening playground turns to rose as night draws to its end.
Aurora's winking in the dawn, soon darkness she will rend.
Thus seeking out soft-pillowed clouds, a place to rest the day,
repose their heads 'til dusk descends, 'twill then resume their play.

Cathy Bollhoefer~
copyright Jan2005

[Eisa]

I second this nomination as I have been looking to nominate this myself. A very original story with wonderful imagery. A good choice Liz and well done Cathy!

Snow

[Cleo_Serapis]

An excellent poem to nominate!

I love this version too!

[Guest_Cathy_*]

Thank you for the nomination Liz... and the very generous compliment! *blush*

Thank you Lori and Snow for your warm thoughts as well!!

Cathy

[Guest_Cathy_*]

PM notification answered

Are you the original author of this poem? Yes

Has this poem ever been published? Syntax & Musings but according to what I read 'published' meant getting paid in some way and that's not the case here.

Has this poem been nominated by any other participating board (of IBPC)? No

Has this poem been reviewed as "best and final" to assure the latest revision is judged? Yes

Is your email address on file up to date? Yes

Do you accept the nomination to submit the work (if selected to represent MM)? Yes... thank you!

If yes to above question, what is your real name? Cathy Bollhoefer

[Guest_Cathy_*]

Revised and ready to fly!!

I've edited the poem above to my final revision~

Cathy

[Eisa]

I would like to nominate this triple rictameter by Daniel for its heartfelt words and stunning format.

Wait… Listen in Silence


Waiting

so we might see

what his clenched fingers cry

through flared nostrils… pain-shaded eyes

whispering with shoulder-shrugs… her bowed head

daring hope with a hopeless glance.

Patient—we must sit… still

to feel what's been

weighting.


Listen

for heaven's sake—

hearing's more than data

we chug in through our fax machine;

as we transfer, processing, we translate

codes shrouded in sinew and veins;

pathos pours forth, bristling

when we truly

listen.


Silent

eyes breathe warm trust

through tight-shuttered windows

shattered from storms still a mem'ry,

duct-taped over with bloodied gauze curtains;

they'll give Light when the power's off,

warmth to a brick-cold hearth,

Love that won't stay

silent.


© MLee Dickens'son 04 Jan 2007
[ Daniel J Ricketts ]

Original:
Wait… Listen in Silence

Waiting
so we might see
what his clenched fingers cry
through flared nostrils… pain-tinted eyes
whispering with shoulder-shrugs… her bowed head
daring hope with a hopeless glance.
Patient—we must sit… still
to feel what's been
weighting.

Listen
for heaven's sake—
it's more than taking data
that is sent through our FAX machine;
though we'll also transfer, process, translate,
runes shrouded in sinew and veins
will pour forth, bristling
when we truly
listen.

Silent
eyes can breathe hope
through tight-shuttered windows
shattered from storms still a memory,
duct taped over with bloody-gauze curtains,
shedding Light when the power's off,
warmth in a brick-cold hearth,
Love that won't stay
silent.

© MLee Dickens'son 04 Jan 2007

This post has been edited by AMETHYST: Jan 29 07, 15:04

Reason for edit: Revised version posted

[AMETHYST]

Really great choice Snow...

and I would like to second this nomination, as I think this is written skillfully, creatively and has a strong and meaningful message.

Permission PM sent!

Hugs, Liz