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| Guest_Cathy_* |
 Oct 22 05, 11:13
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I never liked the original title so I hope it's ok that I changed it.
 Cherish The Old-Fashioned Christmas As silver bells jingle, Ole Kris Kringle regales his tales of Christmas past; when townsfolk gathered to intermingle with heartfelt spirit unsurpassed. His task was easy; door-to-door by joe, but ease of passage did not last. The King stumbled on toy, stubbed his big toe, thereon, Kris was labeled Outcast. The first year Kris tried to chim-chiminey, still bright eager flames danced below; he scurried back up with clinging debris, his rear-end a pulsating glow. Out on the rooftop he wriggled and slid, plopped his fanny into the snow; he'd loosened a shingle which caused his skid, spewed words that were NOT - Ho! Ho! Ho! His dear pal Rudolph had to help; alas, poor ol' Kris loudly moaned and groaned, he carefully stood there clinging to ass - urance that he wasn't de-throned. Now over the years some things have improved, flame-proof suits leave him worry-free ... but best ... online shopping, credit approved, and delivery - COD. Cathy Bollhoefer copyright Oct2005 |
  
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 Oct 22 05, 12:55
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Thank you for your Holiday entry!
 Best of luck to you!  May the 'classic' holiday spirit be shared in your heart throughout the season!  ~ Mosaic Musings Staff        
·······  ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner           |
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Nov 10 05, 02:46
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 3,660 Joined: 23-August 03 From: Somerset, England Member No.: 22 Real Name: Grace Writer of: Poetry & Prose |
Hi Cathy,
 I love your light-hearted history of Kris Kringle (known as Father Christmas on our little island.) I especially liked your ass-urance cleverly carried over two lines. Great fun. Good luck to you Cathy :cheer: ······· ······· Love
Grace http://mysite.orange.co.uk/graceingreece Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take, but by the moments that take our breath away. Nominate a tile for the Crown Jewels and Faery Awards today! For details, go to the Valley of the Kings! MM Award Winner      |
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| Guest_Cathy_* |
Nov 10 05, 08:22
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Thank you Grace!
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Nov 10 05, 10:07
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,621 Joined: 18-August 05 From: Johannesburg, South Africa Member No.: 127 Real Name: Beverleigh Gail Annegarn Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Jox |
I just loved it Cathy!
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| Guest_Cathy_* |
Nov 10 05, 13:06
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Thanks pp!
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| Guest_Nina_* |
Nov 10 05, 15:12
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Hi Cathy
A most chucklesome look at Father Christmas' difficult job. Love the internet shopping line and the one that Grace highlighted. Good luck in the competition. Nina |
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Nov 12 05, 18:38
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 Assyrian Posts: 203 Joined: 3-August 03 Member No.: 11 Real Name: Beth Writer of: Poetry |
Love it!!!!
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Nov 12 05, 21:58
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 Greek Posts: 624 Joined: 6-August 03 From: Texas Member No.: 15 Real Name: Marcia Writer of: Poetry & Prose |
Cathy,
You've certainly captured the humor in Santa's difficult job.~laugh~ Was delighted while I read it ! Enormous fun ! Marcia
······· ·······"...We are born into the world like a blank canvas
and every person that crosses our path takes up the brush and makes their mark upon our surface. So it is that we develop. But we must realize there comes a day that we must take up the brush and finish the work. For only we can determine if we are to be just another painting or a masterpiece..." 1981 Javan (from the book " Meet Me Halfway" ) MM Award Winner |
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Nov 13 05, 00:55
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 3,822 Joined: 3-August 03 From: Florida Member No.: 10 Real Name: Elizabeth Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori Kanter |
Hi Cathy,
This is a must read again and again! It is well written and you don't miss a beat in the telling. The story is light hearted, and fullfilling. Excellent work ······· ·······Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here!
MM Award Winner |
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 Nov 14 05, 14:49
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,802 Joined: 24-April 04 From: Connecticut Member No.: 58 Real Name: Ron Jones Writer of: Poetry |
Dear Cathy,
We all accept the concept that our muses help us put thought to verse and perhaps add eloquence and elation to the message in our words. I don't know to whom to ascribe the credit for the great humor that is found in light verse, but you sure had them joining together for this one! Nicely, nicely done! Cheers, Ron jgd ······· ······· |
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| Guest_Cathy_* |
Nov 14 05, 18:47
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Hi Nina,
A most chucklesome look at Father Christmas' difficult job. Love the internet shopping line and the one that Grace highlighted. Thanks! lol I had fun with this one. Good luck in the competition. Thank you Nina! And to you too! Cathy
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| Guest_Cathy_* |
Nov 14 05, 18:48
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Thank you Nefertiti! :xmas:
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| Guest_Cathy_* |
Nov 14 05, 18:50
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Hi Marcia,
You've certainly captured the humor in Santa's difficult job.~laugh~ Was delighted while I read it ! Enormous fun ! Marcia I'm glad you enjoyed it so! *smiles* Cathy :reindeer:
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| Guest_Cathy_* |
Nov 14 05, 18:52
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Hi Amethyst,
This is a must read again and again! It is well written and you don't miss a beat in the telling. The story is light hearted, and fullfilling. Excellent work Wow Thanks! Good luck with your entries too! Cathy 
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Nov 14 05, 18:54
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Hi Ron,
We all accept the concept that our muses help us put thought to verse and perhaps add eloquence and elation to the message in our words. I don't know to whom to ascribe the credit for the great humor that is found in light verse, but you sure had them joining together for this one! Nicely, nicely done! Thank you Ron, I appreciate your compliment! Cathy
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Dec 4 05, 08:08
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Congratulations! :blueorn: This submission has been nominated as a finalist in the Second Annual Mosaic Musings Holiday Classic!  Best of luck! :holly: ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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| Guest_Cathy_* |
Dec 4 05, 16:46
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Wow! Thanks all!
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Dec 4 05, 17:45
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Assyrian Posts: 203 Joined: 3-August 03 Member No.: 11 Real Name: Beth Writer of: Poetry |
Congrats Cathy! Best Wishes!
Hugs, B. ······· ·······I am who I am.
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| Guest_Cathy_* |
Dec 5 05, 08:26
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Thank you Nef!
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