PI, 3.1416 + 9 + 2 Options

[Psyche]

Poetry
seeks
a long passage
grabs
moment to scribble lines

Poetry
peeks
at boy's bandage
scabs
and old people’s bent spines

Surgery
reeks
of life’s wreckage
labs
pale child’s sniffles and whines

Poetry
shrieks
wait spells ravage
stabs
but doctor shows no signs

of calling out names for ten minute
visit.

By Psyche
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Form: 3.1416 + 9 + 2

[Eisa]

Hi Syl

It's so good to see you posting again.

This one is very clever - when I first read it I didn't even realise it was written in form. The short lines must make it difficult to write.

I'm not sure what the 3.1416 + 9 + 2 form means - can you explain it to me (I am dim at times)

On first read I found some parts difficult to grasp, (probably beacuse of the one word lines) but I'm getting there!

I'll be back if I think of any constructive thoughts.

Hugs
Snow

Poetry
seeks
a long passage
grabs
moment to scribble lines

Poetry
peeks
at boy's bandage
scabs
and old people’s bent spines

Surgery
reeks
of life’s wreckage
labs
pale child’s sniffles and whines

Poetry
shrieks
wait spells ravage
stabs
but doctor shows no signs

of calling out names for ten minute
visit.



Form: 3.1416 + 9 + 2

[Psyche]

Hello Snow!

I'll explain: I was watching a fascinating programme on T.V., moderated by a mathematician who's also a poet. Forget his name, but hope to catch him again. He was explaining the relationship between maths, poetry & music. He gave examples of how one can write poetry using theorems....LOL...

But he said to begin with the simplest kind and suggested PI, from the Greek infinite decimal number 3.14. As this number goes on forever, the idea is to start with short stanzas. So you take 3.14159265 (it goes on forever) and perhaps decide on 5 lines, as I did. But if you pick 5 lines, then the fifth line must have 6 syllables, since the following number is a 9 and if you remember your maths, you must turn the number 5 into a 6 (one always does that when the next number is bigger than 5).

So my experimental poem has lines with 3-1-4-1-6 sylls, in that order. End rhymes can be chosen freely, but must follow a pattern. Hope I managed it....!!

Just for fun, I decided to end the 4 stanzas with a 2-liner, using 9 sylls and 2 sylls (respecting PI, natch).

Thank you so much for commenting, Snow. I would love to know what you think, positive or negative! And any word changes you might prefer.

As for punctuation, this math-poet doesn't use it.... dunno....I liked the poems he made up during the programme, with the help of about 20 students of all ages! On a whiteboard. It was amusing and instructive.

Must grab a bite, hugs, Syl***

Hi Syl

It's so good to see you posting again.

This one is very clever - when I first read it I didn't even realise it was written in form. The short lines must make it difficult to write.

I'm not sure what the 3.1416 + 9 + 2 form means - can you explain it to me (I am dim at times)

On first read I found some parts difficult to grasp, (probably beacuse of the one word lines) but I'm getting there!

I'll be back if I think of any constructive thoughts.

Hugs
Snow

Poetry
seeks
a long passage
grabs
moments to scribble lines

Poetry
peeks
at boy's bandage
scabs
and old people’s bent spines

Surgery
reeks
of life’s wreckage
labs
pale child’s sniffles and whines

Poetry
shrieks
wait spells ravage
stabs
but doctor shows no signs

of calling out names for ten minute
visit.



Form: 3.1416 + 9 + 2

[Sekhmet]

Good morning Syl - What a novel method of writing poetry! I have always enjoyed the
discipline of FF poetry, but FF is, by its very nature, predictable.
Your poem conveyed, with humour, the discomfort and frustration felt by us all when confronted with an overcrowded A&E waiting room or doctor's surgery; yet it was in such an intriguing form.
Thank you for introducing the idea of poetry as a mathematical formula - I'll head off and try some.
Hugs,
Leo

[Eisa]

Wow!!! That's amazing, Syl. I'll have to tell Mike - he's not into poetry, but is great with maths.
This is tight, so I hesitate to make any word changes. I'll have another look.

Poetry
seeks
a long passage
grabs
moment to scribble lines

Perhaps change to 'moments'

Poetry
peeks
at boy's bandage
scabs
and old people’s bent spines

Surgery
reeks
of life’s wreckage
labs
pale child’s sniffles and whines

Poetry
shrieks
wait spells ravage
stabs
but doctor shows no signs

of calling out names for ten minute
visit.

I really can't see anything to change, Syl. If you wanted to make it more personal, you could change the ending to 'of calling my name for ten minute visit'

This really is an intriging form and I'm glad you shared it with us.

Snow