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 Mar 6 11, 09:47
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 18,591 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori  |
on seduction and boobs
confusion, gluttony, a high-speed drive nine-millimeter hand gun, violence more shots, a bloody wreck on 95 arrested rapist claiming innocence a closed community, a run-down tract paid slaves who don't wear chains, their callous boss conspiracy, world capitols attacked a homeless man who eats what others toss malicious gossip and adultery a little slander and dishonesty a sultry glance, a wink, dark mystery the office clan, a corporate dynasty Ah, paranoia, fear, anxiety that daily stalk me .... Thank God for TV! © MLee Dickens’son 27 Feb 2010 ·······  ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Mar 6 11, 10:55
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 Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
Dear Daniel,
Considering your title, you have managed to write a totally clean poem. Amazing. On the title alone I was for the first time having doubts about you - thought you might be more like me than I'd thought. Anyway, I agree completely with the last 2 lines. Love Alan ······· ······· |
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Mar 7 11, 03:00
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 Greek Posts: 743 Joined: 3-February 09 From: Abingdon, Oxfordshire,UK Member No.: 754 Real Name: Leonora Wyatt Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:No one at all |
How could I resist rushing to open this? Has Daniel decided to bare his id? Would that be a wise move?
But aha! - Breathe a sigh of relief. A telling flick through the evening's typical TV offerings. But you kept me guessing to the end. Great fun, Hugs, Leo ······· ······· |
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Mar 8 11, 07:45
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Ornate Oracle  Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr |
Daniel,
Of course your title caught my attention then when I read it, it is reality come to life. Your take on the current newsmakers in the world points out the depravity in man and socieity and it is something we need to focus on and not run away from it. Your first lines have an opening salvo that is well written and of course very close to home here in the Northeast... confusion, gluttony, a high-speed drive nine-millimeter hand gun, violence more shots, a bloody wreck on 95 arrested rapist claiming innocence Well done view of the current state of affairs. JLY ······· ·······Give thanks for your new friends of today, but never forget the warm hugs of your yesterdays.
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Mar 11 11, 00:56
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,389 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
Hi Daniel,
Didn't know what to expect; what with your sense of humor and all and was pleasantly surprised to find a very laudable denunciation of the "boob-tube" in a very precise sonnet in IP. All this with a nice bit of ironic sarcasm for the punctuation mark at the end. Well done and well said. Larry ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner  |
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