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 Feb 4 16, 18:42
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 Assyrian  Posts: 248 Joined: 10-November 15 From: Sunny Florida Member No.: 5,293 Real Name: YC Writer of: Poetry Referred By:TCP  |
ice cream so delicious forget the slinky dress come here my sexy Rocky Road keep me company this fierce summer night your salty hard bits thrill my soul bliss on a sugar cone my love, my dear ice cream |
  
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Feb 5 16, 10:15
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,389 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
I scream my approval for your Rictameter posted in this critique forum, my favorite: white chocolate almond sends my taste buds in a frenzy but only in winter is it produced; eye’s cream. Luce, thanks for putting this over here in Hermes to let everyone know there are other forms in which one may express themselves. It probably belongs in Seren’s because it is unrhymed but we won’t quibble about that. If anyone wants to join in the fun, there are lots of nice strings to follow in Karnak and all are good exercise in honing your poetic skills. Larry ·······  ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner       |
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Feb 5 16, 18:58
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Assyrian Posts: 248 Joined: 10-November 15 From: Sunny Florida Member No.: 5,293 Real Name: YC Writer of: Poetry Referred By:TCP |
Thanks Larry.
I'm glad you liked it. However, I disagree with the form not belonging here. It's a fixed syllabic form like haiku or tanka. It doesn't have to rhyme. |
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Feb 6 16, 08:01
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
QUOTE (Luce @ Feb 5 16, 23:58 )  Thanks Larry. I'm glad you liked it. However, I disagree with the form not belonging here. It's a fixed syllabic form like haiku or tanka. It doesn't have to rhyme. You are correct Luce. this is not FV and therefore does not belong in Seren's. This forum is for all types of forms and there are some that do not rhyme. This forum is not just for rhyming poetry, Larry. I love this rictameter, Luce which makes me long for an ice-cream! Eira ······· ·······Live one day at a time -it's simpler that way.
Laugh loud & often - it's medicinal. Write from the heart - it's therapeutic. Beauty comes from within - the outer is just skin! Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here! MM Award Winner        |
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Feb 6 16, 12:41
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,591 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
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to be quite late in offering critique of what once was my favorite form in which to write my thoughts and feelings. You have done so remarkably making me want a cone going for which I seem. ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Feb 6 16, 13:44
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Assyrian Posts: 248 Joined: 10-November 15 From: Sunny Florida Member No.: 5,293 Real Name: YC Writer of: Poetry Referred By:TCP |
Eira and Daniel, My work is done. Awesome!! I'll treat. Ice cream for all! Get the Chunky Monkey. On sale. I say, let's live "la vida loca"..ish! Lock up the scale. Don't look today. Sweet cream so delicious. Pusher for fudge. My work. Luce |
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Feb 11 16, 02:00
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 8,882 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
Hi Luce, I've been enjoying your Rictameter immensely! Had a good laugh with other's contributions. But too late for "your treat"...might return in time for a last lick. LOL.  Must try this form. Probably looks easier than it is, for me anyway. Bedtime! Syl  ······· ·······Mis temas favoritos
The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner  |
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Feb 11 16, 09:33
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Assyrian Posts: 248 Joined: 10-November 15 From: Sunny Florida Member No.: 5,293 Real Name: YC Writer of: Poetry Referred By:TCP |
QUOTE (Psyche @ Feb 11 16, 02:00 ) Hi Luce, I've been enjoying your Rictameter immensely! Had a good laugh with other's contributions. But too late for "your treat"...might return in time for a last lick. LOL. I'm glad you like it Syl. Must try this form. Probably looks easier than it is, for me anyway. You can pump it up by adding meter and a rhyme scheme. Bedtime! Syl Night, Night!!! [/color][/b] |
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Mar 19 16, 05:50
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 Egyptian Posts: 399 Joined: 11-April 13 From: Australia - The great Southern Land Member No.: 5,178 Real Name: Maureen Clifford Writer of: Poetry Referred By:arnfinn |
I love it - your poem and Ice-cream. I am completely in ignorance of this poetic form but you have made me want to know more. Isn't it beaut how we can continue to learn even as we age.....I am intending to have a go at a Rictameter myself
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Mar 20 16, 21:26
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Assyrian Posts: 248 Joined: 10-November 15 From: Sunny Florida Member No.: 5,293 Real Name: YC Writer of: Poetry Referred By:TCP |
QUOTE (Maureen @ Mar 19 16, 06:50 ) I love it - your poem and Ice-cream. I am completely in ignorance of this poetic form but you have made me want to know more. Isn't it beaut how we can continue to learn even as we age.....I am intending to have a go at a Rictameter myself Thanks Maureen. I'm glad you liked it. If you want to know how to do one, go to the Karnak Crossing forum. It's basically a syllabic form but you can increase the difficulty by adding meter and rhyme, if you wish. |
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