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JustDaniel
post Oct 12 04, 04:41
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Senryu is a short form of poetry identical in construction to haiku: (three lines with 17 or fewer syllables with a cut after the first or second line forming two related snapshots of an experience of reality), but is generally about human foibles, while haiku references nature. Senryu need not include a kigo, or season word, like haiku (though it seems that much of modern English haiku tends toward senryu; that is, unlike traditional Japanese haiku, it may not necessarily adhere to the 5-7-5 syllable form which may be suitable in Japanese, but which tends to produce long or stilted language in English). A simple rule seems to be, Take a deep breath and read all three lines... cut and all.

I'll offer a couple of examples of my own, however inadequate. Perhaps someone with greater stature would like to add greater insight to this thread.

How I love thee
with breadth, length, depth and height…
but who counts the days?


© MLee Dickens'son 11 Oct 2004


feeling seventeen
your heart pounds out senryu;
you just can’t beat it


© MLee Dickens'son 14 Feb 2004

By the way, I understand that they're often with a bit of humor, so I don't think I'm desecrating the form if I wink a bit.

sharin' a bit o' de Light, Daniel  sun.gif


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my drive helps dentist
because I forget to brush;
he fills in the gaps


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He felt in the grapes
for seeds of sobriety;
don’t ferment the juice.


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don't foment for Jews
who will not come to your aid
ask those in Gaza


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Those in Gaza asked
their leaders, Hamas, for peace.
The Jewry’s still out.


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the jury's still lout
refused to give a pinion;
could hear feather drop


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A feather drops near
the tree with the eagle’s nest,
fledglings are fed meat.


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fledglings meet a Fed;
giving him an eagle eye
they flee to their nest


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