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Aug 25 03, 17:21
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I just got a 'YES' from Michael Walker who invented this very catchy new type of poetic form called the Monotetra...WAY COOL!
Here is his definition and examples of this new form. You can find Michael's works at The Starlight Cafe: http://www.thestarlitecafe.com under the pen name: Bronze Dragon..... :troy: :vic: :pharoah2
"Monotetra
The monotetra consists of any number of stanzas of four lines each. Each stanza contains a monorhyme, so that the pattern of the stanzas would be “aaaa bbbb cccc” and so on… this is where the “mono” in the name of the form comes in.
The “tetra” in the name of the form is because each line of each stanza is written in tetrameter – to those who hate metrical feet and such, this simply means that each line has eight (8) syllables. There is no need for “iambs” here…
The other aspect of the monotetra is that the fourth line of each stanza is a repeating four-syllable phrase. It does not have to be an EXACT repetition, but close. Sound simple? Here’s an example stanza…
The monotetra’s catching fast But how long will its allure last? Who knows! The future’s wide and vast So like the past, so like the past… "...
Here is another example of Michaels;
Song for Solace
'Tis moonlight dim upon the sky As shadows play across my eye, When oft these memories I spy – That pass me by, they pass me by...
The creak of wood in unused halls Reminding of long-past footfalls, As to our bed you'd quickly crawl – In fright and all, in fright and all...
These nights I often hear the sound Of silent footsteps on the grounds. Although I know no one's around – I wander out, still wander out…
Oh yes, this neighborhood has changed It’s denizens quite rearranged, And every neighbor seems estranged – How times will change, how fast they change…
Not long before, I thought not twice To leave a window ope at night – To grant you leave to ride your bike Alone at night, alone that night…
I know the blame is not my own And sinners reap what they have sown, But thoughts help not when I’m alone – I should have known, I should have known…
‘Tis moonlight dim upon the sky Your face – imprinted on my mind It’s now I know I have to try To say goodbye, to say goodbye…
Thanks Michael!
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Oct 4 03, 16:42
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QUOTE (Alan @ Oct. 03 2003, 04:47) Dear Cleo and Michael
Michael, this form is delightful ! I know your examples are "serious", but I see it as VERY Lewis Carrollesque. See below : (and please give me some ruthless feedback !)
Love Alan
THIS IS THE QUESTION
A ghost on battlements appears; Hamlet can/can’t believe his ears And eyes, at all, but what he hears Will stoke his fears, does stoke his fears.
Ham’s Dad is dead, poison imbued, Administered by uncle lewd, Whom Hamlet’s Mum, so hot, pursued; Call her Gertrude, call her Gert, rude.
Ham’s lady friend attention gets As off she floats, by egress wet. Will she return, don’t place your bets, She pays her debts, she pays his debts .....
Old Pol to hide, does arras grab, Stage whisp’ring, he’d the gift of gab, No longer able now to blab, Another slab, another slab.
Young Hamlet thinks, or thinks he found A firm idea, one which is sound, But indecisive, he is crowned Above the ground ? No ! 'Neath the ground !
These frolics at old Elsinore At school I used to find a bore, Now I’m inspired, could write much more. “What ever for ?” “No, nevermore !”
So pleased, new poem form to find, Original, quite different kind. First effort poor ? I’ve half a mind To leave unsigned, or shall I sign .....
And yet ..... Alan McAlpine Douglas Well well Alan!
This is a great first monotetra! :pharoah2
I'll have to go back and peek at the requirements, but I do believe you cannot vary Line four, it must repeat in 4 syllables. NOPE- you CAN vary line 4 in each stanza (slightly as you've done here)!
VERY CLEVER! :detective: :detective: :detective: :pilgrim:
All I can think of after reading this one is that movie "Renaissance Man" when Danny Devito is trying to teach his army recruits literature using Hamlet. What's great as a poet, is that he teaches RHYTHM by using a chant - da da da da da...tapping on the desk for them...So they come back with this:
Hamlet's mother, she's the queen Buys it in the final scene Drinks a glass of funky wine Now she's Satan's Valentine.
See - you've got the beat my friend!
Cheers! ~Cleo :pharoah:
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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