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  Dec 17 06, 20:50
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 2,085 Joined: 24-May 04 From: Time, Immoral Member No.: 66 Writer of: Poetry  |
 Full moon and starlight glow, you reappear once more like ghosts from long ago. A smile; we touch, caress, I stroke your hair. We love. When morning sprinkles lavender across this purple plain, you disappear, full moon. Perhaps it’s not a dream. Your perfume lingers while one naughty star stays put to wink at me; it’s like some harlequin up high whose escapade on heaven’s stair lets stardust flakes cascade. Sweet melodies, perhaps. Red haze
disguises fields and fabled hills as dawn awakes. She brings veracity in crystal drops of primal rainbow dew, reciting bead by bead from one enchanted, endless string. Then sunrise fades red haze. ·······  ······· |
  
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Dec 18 06, 10:49
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 Greek Posts: 624 Joined: 6-August 03 From: Texas Member No.: 15 Real Name: Marcia Writer of: Poetry & Prose |
lovely......the poetic images and the unusual shaped format. Just lovely.
Nothing more to say~ Marcia ······· ·······"...We are born into the world like a blank canvas
and every person that crosses our path takes up the brush and makes their mark upon our surface. So it is that we develop. But we must realize there comes a day that we must take up the brush and finish the work. For only we can determine if we are to be just another painting or a masterpiece..." 1981 Javan (from the book " Meet Me Halfway" ) MM Award Winner    |
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Dec 18 06, 11:57
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,578 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
This is wonderful stuff, Merlin! I also like the creative use of the left, center, and right justification. Very effective.
Makes my effort look like a schoolboy's exercise!  Bravo!  deLightin' in yer sharin', Daniel 
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Dec 19 06, 05:03
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Merlin this is wonderful! Not only do your words give me goosebumps, but the format you have used is really stunning and clever. Well done!!
Snow 
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Laugh loud & often - it's medicinal. Write from the heart - it's therapeutic. Beauty comes from within - the outer is just skin! Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here! MM Award Winner      |
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Dec 19 06, 07:40
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,802 Joined: 24-April 04 From: Connecticut Member No.: 58 Real Name: Ron Jones Writer of: Poetry |
Dear Merlin,
Indeed ingenious!. I've been no advocate of shaped poetry in the past, but this adds a flair. Imagine repeating the format with 3 or 6 more, making the subject snowfall on Christmas eve! Wow! Cheers, Ron jgd ······· ······· |
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Dec 20 06, 10:05
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Hi Merlin,
I love this... both the topic and your format! Your word choice is lovely (especially the second verse!) I've stopped in here to read this about 5 times and I enjoy it more each time I read it!  Well done~ Cathy
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Dec 20 06, 12:18
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Ooh - what a neat shape poem Eric!
I'm  around like a  with my head cut off at the moment but I'll be back to enjoy the WORDS in your poem soon.Take care for now! Lori 
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner  |
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Dec 20 06, 20:55
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 2,085 Joined: 24-May 04 From: Time, Immoral Member No.: 66 Writer of: Poetry |
Thank you for your kind remarks, Marcia, Daniel, Snow, Ron, Cathy & Lori.
Y'all can make a fella blush! The form is a bit different, purely syllabic and not requiring rhyme or meter. It's better if it has some of those techniques, I find. On a narrower page, the 3 shapes are effective. I really appreciate each comment. Merlin ······· ······· |
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Dec 21 06, 11:51
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,802 Joined: 24-April 04 From: Connecticut Member No.: 58 Real Name: Ron Jones Writer of: Poetry |
QUOTE (Merlin @ Dec 21 06, 01:55 )  Thank you for your kind remarks, Marcia, Daniel, Snow, Ron, Cathy & Lori. Y'all can make a fella blush! The form is a bit different, purely syllabic and not requiring rhyme or meter. It's better if it has some of those techniques, I find. On a narrower page, the 3 shapes are effective. I really appreciate each comment. Merlin Dear Merlin, Nothing as pretty as falling snow nor as beautiful as the snowscape it produces. I envision nine flakes falling helter-skelter and a long lined poem with land contours and a pond in the foreground. All the background black, snowflakes and snow in white letters and the pond in blue ones. Cheers, Ron jgd ······· ······· |
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Mar 5 07, 08:08
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,578 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Hey, Eric...
I just wanted to return again to put this one at the top of the page... 'cause that's where it belongs. You deserve the acclaim that this has brought you. It focuses your gifts, insight, experience, wisdom, taste and artistry -- and so much more -- all into one snapshot of a man we've all come to love and respect. so again... Bravo! Bravo! Bravo! Huzzah! deLighting to share with you, Daniel
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