Welcome Guest ( Log In | Register )

IPB
> Doubtful Directives, For crits & nits!
Psyche
post Sep 29 10, 00:19
Post #1


Ornate Oracle
Group Icon

Group: Praetorian
Posts: 3,801
Joined: 27-August 04
From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia
Member No.: 78
Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:Grace Galton & David Ting



(Just out of the oven. Had to write something to get worse thoughts out of my head..)


Go… slip into your familiar fiefdom sealed to me;
I’ll say adios now –to my feelings not you-
as I release your angel arm,
admitting the unattainable.

Go with your peers through nether
portals of the mind, stranger than witchcraft.
Dark shores bordering lightness!
Maybe I too will traverse their sands,
beyond reason, more cryptic than art
or the poetic word.

My goodbye is irreversible. You’ll not know
me if I, too, plummet into improvident spans.
Today I can only sit by you, disregarding
your prattle, valuing nothing,
yet confident of some sheltering empathy
in the synchronicity of our lives.

Go before I burst out crying for the self
I loved in you; stumble off as if nothing
happened, when everything has happened!
Grope your droll road to baffling echelons
with their odd laws -everything has laws,
even lunacy-
I’ll not browbeat you back
into this world tagged normal.

Set off now!
It’s time to let go…

By Psyche

© Sylvia Evelyn, Buenos Aires, Argentina, 2010.
All rights reserved.


·······IPB·······

Mis temas favoritos



"There is no life higher than the grasstops
Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind
Pours by like destiny, bending
Everything in one direction."

Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights.



Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!

MM Award Winner
 
+Quote Post  Go to the top of the page
 
Start new topic
Replies
Guest_ohsteve_*
post Oct 30 10, 21:56
Post #2





Guest






Sylvia, A very moving piece, I have read it twice and still I cannot find fault with it. I hope that your times of trouble will finally stop now.

You Take care it is really great to see your writing back on the boards,
Hugs
Steve
 
+Quote Post  Go to the top of the page
Psyche
post Nov 11 10, 23:36
Post #3


Ornate Oracle
Group Icon

Group: Praetorian
Posts: 3,801
Joined: 27-August 04
From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia
Member No.: 78
Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:Grace Galton & David Ting




Dear Steve,
I'm glad you find this piece moving. No nits??!! LOL.....but OK.

I've been reading about your own health troubles, Steve, and I sincerely hope you'll feel better soon. It's amazing how you keep writing better & better poetry in spite of feeling wobbly. I admire you so much...wow... bowdown.gif

You take care too. I'm trying to get back in the forums, but stuff piles up and makes my Muse glum... ghostface.gif

Hugs, Syl*** cloud9.gif



QUOTE (ohsteve @ Oct 31 10, 04:56 ) *
Sylvia, A very moving piece, I have read it twice and still I cannot find fault with it. I hope that your times of trouble will finally stop now.

You Take care it is really great to see your writing back on the boards,
Hugs
Steve



·······IPB·······

Mis temas favoritos



"There is no life higher than the grasstops
Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind
Pours by like destiny, bending
Everything in one direction."

Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights.



Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!

MM Award Winner
 
+Quote Post  Go to the top of the page


1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
0 Members:

Reply to this topicStart new topic

 

RSS Lo-Fi Version Time is now: 25th August 2019 - 06:51




Read our FLYERS - click below



Reference links provided to aid in fine-tuning your writings. ENJOY!

more Quotes
more Art Quotes
Dictionary.com ~ Thesaurus.com

Search:
for
Type in a word below to find its rhymes, synonyms, and more:

Word: