A stark tale this, Jan. The first stanza sets the tone and the deep sense of deprivation gets steadily worse as it goes on.
Can I check out the last two verses with you ?
Twenty adults and children sharing one loo, a bathroom, my mother explained was for rich people she used cleaned one when in service. Do you mean Twenty adults and children sharing one loo, a bathroom, my mother explained was for rich people. She cleaned one when in service. or Twenty adults and children sharing one loo, a bathroom, my mother explained was for rich people. She used a clean one when in service
The berg was not a mountain only a big rock, now dynamited to give way to progress, crushed memories not even the very old remember(s) it. (wrong tense.)
Tom .
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