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Aug 3 03, 16:40
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Haiku is one of the most important forms of traditional Japanese poetry. Haiku is, today, a 17-syllable verse form consisting of three metrical units of 5, 7, and 5 syllables respectively.
Haiku (in English) usually appears as an unrhymed three-line verse. It should balance intense, fragmentary imagery with stress on rhythm and sound. Though it can be presented in three lines, a haiku structurally consists of two parts with a pause in between. The power behind it derives from the juxtaposition of the two images and the sense of surprise or revelation that the second image produces. A good haiku is like a good joke: the set-up, then the punch line.
In the broadest sense,Haiku is about Nature. In Japan, most haiku have a season word (Spring, Summer, Autumn, Winter, New Years) that links the poem with the vast, archetypal round of the Year of Life. Today, in place of the season word, some contemporary haiku poets use keywords that express common themes of human experience (for example, "mother"). This, however, is a matter of controversy in modern haiku.
Some examples of tradition Haiku are listed below by Japanese Poet, Kobayashi Issa for you to enjoy.
in falling rain one man remains... blossom shade
the cherry blossoms that stirred me, shade me no more
through falling snow a spring breeze blows
have you come to save us haiku poets? red dragonfly
Please feel free to add to this thread your own haiku.. Mosaic Musings Staff
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Aug 28 03, 12:11
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Seven sunrises bumping up Tolt River Road on the way to work.
A low gibbous moon follows treetops and the bus up the logging road.
Cascade eastwind blows down long valley waking young fir tips swaying.
I ride on logging roads slippery with frost in the middle of a sunrise fire.
Purpled pink hues pierce frosted air to dance laketop between mountain pairs.
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Aug 30 03, 06:52
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QUOTE (Brahms @ Aug. 28 2003, 12:11) Seven sunrises bumping up Tolt River Road on the way to work.
A low gibbous moon follows treetops and the bus up the logging road.
Cascade eastwind blows down long valley waking young fir tips swaying.
I ride on logging roads slippery with frost in the middle of a sunrise fire.
Purpled pink hues pierce frosted air to dance laketop between mountain pairs. Hi Stephen~
Marvelously sweet and shining with colorful images!
Keep on writing!
Take care~
Aphrodite (Lindi)
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Aug 30 03, 07:39
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Nicely done Brahms! :sun:
Look forward to reading more haiku from you! :pharoah2
~Cleo :pharoah:
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Aug 31 03, 22:09
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A small collection:
Soft air, clear night skies Katydids and crickets sing Moonbeams stretch for miles
Raindrops glisten, fall, Silver Spider's garden web Tears of the twilight
The Blue Heron lands A stately Pterodactyl Ancient Oak limbs sway
Morgan le Fay Mistress of Magic
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Aug 31 03, 22:30
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Very fine, Morgan, besides the 5-7-5 balance they so easily place me into the place and time you captured. So good because that is part of the intention of haiku. I shall be happy to share more of mine as I learn to ride the 3-1-2 balance, after I share my next poem.
Riding with new saddle, Brahms
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Aug 31 03, 22:52
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Pasture Waiting
Water cascading thin stream into water trough summer layers land.
Munching horses bow delightful evening dusk extra hay now gone.
Horse-trough goldfish rise up wondering dancing flies anyone care dance?
Setting sun deepens woods light green leaves becoming gone quiet rests the land.
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Sep 1 03, 07:28
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Summer Leaves for Fall
sunned limbs twist inward, packing up her trunk, leaving memories to wind
© Daniel J Ricketts 01 Sept 2003
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Sep 1 03, 08:56
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QUOTE (Brahms @ Aug. 31 2003, 23:30) Very fine, Morgan, besides the 5-7-5 balance they so easily place me into the place and time you captured. So good because that is part of the intention of haiku. I shall be happy to share more of mine as I learn to ride the 3-1-2 balance, after I share my next poem.
Riding with new saddle, Brahms Hi Brahms.
In ALL the threads within "Karnak Crossing" - the 1:3:2 rule is NOT in effect. This is a learning forum and all the threads posted here do not have those 'rules' attached....
Cheers! ~Cleo :pharoah2
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Sep 11 03, 05:26
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Hey, LorII! Try ignoring THIS one! Strawberries Blonde
cut off their green hair;
bowl them over at knifepoint
to serve, cream-caked, whipped
© Daniel J Ricketts 11 Sept 2003
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Sep 11 03, 05:29
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QUOTE (Just Daniel @ Sep. 11 2003, 06:26) Hey, LorII! Try ignoring THIS one! Strawberries Blonde
cut off their green hair;
bowl them over at knifepoint
to serve, cream-caked, whipped
© Daniel J Ricketts 11 Sept 2003 Daniel! Well, since I'm BLONDE AND I like starwberries, methinks me like! YUMMY!!!!! HUGAROOOOS! ~Cleo
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Sep 11 03, 12:27
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Low clouds scuttling gentle dark and white these Trappist men.
Trappist quiet rainsong on the pond.
Gentle rain wetting yellow grass men move inside!
Youthful purpose widens child and mother distance walking home.
A hermit bullfrog bellows all his eveings over monk's path.
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Sep 11 03, 16:52
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Hi,
One can also have a haiku cycle where there are several verses (stanzas if one prefers) and in which the first line of the one verse is the same as the last line of the previous - with a final wrap-round at the end, back to the beginning. Moreover, the concept should also by cyclical. I present one below. I seem to remember that I had a doubt about the exact syllable count - I can never seem to assess those correctly. However, basically it is a genuine haiku cycle (it was written for a class in which I was a student some years ago). I will re-post this for crit at some future point; I post it here as an example of a haiku cycle (although you may make any comment if you wish - feel free). It is also in the haiku tradition of observing nature and its changes. By the way, it really was inspired by watching my dogs leap into the air in futile attempts to catch flies.
© James Oxenholme 2003. I, James Oxenholme, hereby assert and give notice of my right under Section 77 of the Copyright, Designs and Patents Act 1988 (Law of Wales & England - as recognised by the international Berne Convention) to be identified as the author of the following article: ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
The World's Dog Days by Jox (Writing as JL - # 0025)
Subtitle: The Splendid Futility Haiku (With acknowledgement to Wilfred Owen)
Dogs jumping for flies; An ancient tree gently dies. Summer fades each day.
Summer fades each day; Ferns turn brown along the way. Winter's coming soon.
Winter's coming soon; Insects wrap in their cocoon. The World hibernates.
The World hibernates; Frosty hoar clings to the slates. All is quiet now.
All is quiet now; Snow covers every tree's bough. Spring awaits its time
Spring awaits its time; Magically, brown turns to lime. The World in flourish.
The World in flourish; Life everywhere to nourish. The sun's rays give life.
The sun's rays give life; Why have a World full of strife? Dogs jumping for flies.
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Sep 11 03, 18:20
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QUOTE (Jox @ Sep. 11 2003, 17:52) Hi,
One can also have a haiku cycle where there are several verses (stanzas if one prefers) and in which the first line of the one verse is the same as the last line of the previous - with a final wrap-round at the end, back to the beginning. Moreover, the concept should also by cyclical. I present one below. I seem to remember that I had a doubt about the exact syllable count - I can never seem to assess those correctly. However, basically it is a genuine haiku cycle (it was written for a class in which I was a student some years ago). I will re-post this for crit at some future point; I post it here as an example of a haiku cycle (although you may make any comment if you wish - feel free). It is also in the haiku tradition of observing nature and its changes. By the way, it really was inspired by watching my dogs leap into the air in futile attempts to catch flies.
© James Oxenholme 2003. I, James Oxenholme, hereby assert and give notice of my right under Section 77 of the Copyright, Designs and Patents Act 1988 (Law of Wales & England - as recognised by the international Berne Convention) to be identified as the author of the following article: ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
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The World's Dog Days by Jox (Writing as JL)
Subtitle: The Splendid Futility Haiku (With acknowledgement to Wilfred Owen)
Dogs jumping for flies; An ancient tree gently dies. Summer fades each day.
Summer fades each day; Ferns turn brown along the way. Winter's coming soon.
Winter's coming soon; Insects wrap in their cocoon. The World hibernates.
The World hibernates; Frosty hoar clings to the slates. All is quiet now.
All is quiet now; Snow covers every tree's bough. Spring awaits its time
Spring awaits its time; Magically, brown turns to lime. The World in flourish.
The World in flourish; Life everywhere to nourish. The sun's rays give life.
The sun's rays give life; Why have a World full of strife? Dogs jumping for flies. WOW! :artist: :musicband: :angel:
These are great! You've added another level to this form.
Wonderful! :pharoah2 :cloud9:
Excellent sample as well!
Cheers! ~Cleo :pharoah: :fish: :tigger: :glitter:
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Sep 26 03, 01:50
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Dear Jox
What'a all this about "I don't do poetic forms" !
This cycle is brilliant, and as said, takes us to a new level .....
Love Alan
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Sep 26 03, 13:39
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Cleo and Alan,
Thank you very much indeed. I really only dabble in poetry whilst trying to be a successful novelist (ie have one published!). Even more rarely do I use a form - think this and my recent toilet are the only two, apart from a three-line odd hikau. I suspect that the only time I can write in form is when the whim (sounding like Cleo now!) provides me with a strong tale to tell. Anything weaker and it has to be free-form.
Still, I have the scissors here and will be cutting your very flattering comments off the screen and framing them on the wall.
Thank you. Jox.
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Oct 20 03, 03:24
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Oct 20 03, 03:30
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Hello Daniel,
Summer Leaves for Fall
QUOTE sunned limbs twist inward, packing up her trunk, leaving memories to wind
Clever use of colour to illustrate this one Daniel and a great image of Autumn's end.
Cheers
Grace
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Oct 20 03, 04:08
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Grace; most kind of you (as always!). Thank you very much. That's one of the nicest things anyone has said about my writing. Keeps one going and all that. So, if anyone asks why I'm still turning out poems when I should shut up I'll blame you!
Again, thank you Grace. I really appreciate what you said.
Strangely, I have just been replying to a crit of that very poem (I have posted it in the poetry crit area now). So if you wish to take a look please feel free to do so.
James.
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Oct 20 03, 07:15
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This is coming along nicely! :)
Although I must admit that this one:
I ride on logging roads slippery with frost in the middle of a sunrise fire.
Is not Haiku (too many syllables per line) although it is pretty! :sun: Brahms - would you like to re-write that one perhaps so it's 5/7/5?
Cheers! ~Cleo :pharoah:
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