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  Nov 15 05, 16:07
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 1,802 Joined: 24-April 04 From: Connecticut Member No.: 58 Real Name: Ron Jones Writer of: Poetry  |
When Santa rests his reindeer
aft' Christmas eves up north, he faces then his main fear proceeding to go forth. In tropic climes his camels replace his cervidae*. They are the best of mammals in lands so hot and dry. Antepodic summer occurs at Christmas time. So Santa drives a hummer, the gas he burns, a crime! *deer family ·······  ······· |
  
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Nov 15 05, 19:34
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 Assyrian Posts: 203 Joined: 3-August 03 Member No.: 11 Real Name: Beth Writer of: Poetry |
Oh, don't even mention Hummers to me! ARGH! Like a soccer mom really needs a Hummer! Oh, you just don't know how many people in this area feel the need to drive them. Yes, LA area is dangerous but not that dangerous! Sheesh! Very clever indeed! Them are some mighty fine word y'all gots in thar! Made my brain hurt jest tryin' ta read 'em! Ya must be quite the learn-ed fellow! (Sorry, still stuck in redneck mode! LOL!)
It's nice to know I'm not the only one with a twisted point of view! LOL! Hugs! B. ······· ·······I am who I am.
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Nov 15 05, 19:37
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Thank you for your Holiday entry! :holly:
Best of luck to you! :dove: May the 'classic' holiday spirit be shared in your heart throughout the season! :blueorn: ~ Mosaic Musings Staff :knight: :pharoah: :viking: :vic: :troy: :roman: :cali: :tut: :knight: ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner           |
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Nov 15 05, 22:01
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 3,822 Joined: 3-August 03 From: Florida Member No.: 10 Real Name: Elizabeth Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori Kanter |
Delightful Ron... Quite delightful.
Much enjoyed this witty and humorous toy with the hummer, but like Bethie, I often wonder... where do these people with Hummers think they live anyway? ... Do they know something that I don't? Does Santa? Ah, yes, he has that list, ut oh... never mind! People with Hummers are fine... just fine! Seriously, good verse! Best to you, Liz ······· ·······Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here!
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| Guest_Nina_* |
Nov 16 05, 00:46
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Hi Ron
Confession time. I have no idea what a hummer is. It sounds like a giant bird but I assume it is a car of some sort. I enjoyed the rest of Santa's holiday though. Good luck in the competition. Nina |
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Nov 16 05, 15:25
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 Greek Posts: 624 Joined: 6-August 03 From: Texas Member No.: 15 Real Name: Marcia Writer of: Poetry & Prose |
I am not very knowledgable, but a hummer, I believe, is a Hum-V vehicle, which I believe is the automobile equvilant to the tank ! Very expensive to own, I think. I just know that I find them hideous !Big and ugly !
Marcia  ······· ·······"...We are born into the world like a blank canvas
and every person that crosses our path takes up the brush and makes their mark upon our surface. So it is that we develop. But we must realize there comes a day that we must take up the brush and finish the work. For only we can determine if we are to be just another painting or a masterpiece..." 1981 Javan (from the book " Meet Me Halfway" ) MM Award Winner |
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Nov 16 05, 15:40
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Greek Posts: 624 Joined: 6-August 03 From: Texas Member No.: 15 Real Name: Marcia Writer of: Poetry & Prose |
Now, Ron,
Regardless of I feel about hummers this was well-executed and fun ! I can picture in my mind.....Santa on camels and in a Hum-V. I see him sweating buckets in his heavy winter suit, negotiating the warmer climes ! ~laugh~ Marcia
······· ·······"...We are born into the world like a blank canvas
and every person that crosses our path takes up the brush and makes their mark upon our surface. So it is that we develop. But we must realize there comes a day that we must take up the brush and finish the work. For only we can determine if we are to be just another painting or a masterpiece..." 1981 Javan (from the book " Meet Me Halfway" ) MM Award Winner |
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| Guest_Don_* |
Nov 17 05, 09:00
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Hi Ron,
Very delightful as per usual from your pen. This past summer I asked an owner of a bright yellow hummer what of its gas mileage? I suppose it is like the answer about owning a yacht, if you have to ask you can't afford it. His answer with levity was, "ten mile per gallon downhill and five uphill. Good enough for Santa who has all the best toys. Don |
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