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[Guest_iPenguin_*]

I'm not sure if I'm allowed to post this, since I entered it into the competition thing, and I'm new here so I don't really know all the rules yet, but I wrote this really recently and it's one of my rare attempts at free verse, but overall I'm satisfied with it, so I figured I'd post it here too.

The traveler peers into the gloom
Discovering what it means to be alive
Wandering silently, peacefully
Drifting mistily, ever asleep.

Dewy eyes of golden starlight
Sparkling reassuringly
To the tune of the summer breeze
In the long grass
I watch in silence, for a moment
No more.

Weren't we there, for a time?
For a brief moment, in an instant of glass?
Or was it a dream?

Sweeping eerily, wistfully
Through the night sky
On the backs of clouds
Frozen for a moment
Suspended, motionless
Soaring
For a moment.

Travel with me now
Pull apart the mists of illusion
And part the curtains of despair
Step into the realm of a moment.

A field of white with drops of silver glaze
Perhaps above us, but who can tell?
It drifted in and out of focus
But we didn't.

Weren't we there for a time?
Shimmering in a pool of starlight?
Or was it a dream?

Opening eyes, extinguish the sun
Dreamwriter lays down his pen
And I almost believed what he wrote
For a moment.

[AMETHYST]

Hello and welcome to Mosaic Musings,

To answer your question, I don't think there is any rule against posting in Odin's and posting for display in Platos.

This is an interesting poem, as it is like a journey and the narrator a tour guide. It has many lovely phrases and ideas working well together.

Best Regards, Liz