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Two Lighthouses, photos by Ali Zonak, NEW CHALLENGE: Inspirational pictures for poets |
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Aug 4 17, 11:01
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Aug 10 17, 23:01
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Hi Ali, I've moved your lovely lighthouses over to Acropolis as well, for the weekly MM challenges. I've left them in Hermes, because I don't know whether you wish them to remain. Please let me know, so that members know that the challenge is set up. Best, Psyche
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Aug 11 17, 06:35
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QUOTE (Psyche @ Aug 11 17, 00:01 ) Hi Ali, I've moved your lovely lighthouses over to Acropolis as well, for the weekly MM challenges. I've left them in Hermes, because I don't know whether you wish them to remain. Please let me know, so that members know that the challenge is set up. Best, Psyche Thanks, Psyche; yes, this is perfectly fine. I hope other members are up to the challenge. Ali
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Aug 11 17, 16:06
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for the lighthouse painted like a barber pole
Folks don’t come for a haircut or shave to this house that’s tucked into a nave of a rocky coastline but I think it’s divine to save most from a watery grave.
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Aug 11 17, 19:24
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QUOTE (Larry @ Aug 11 17, 16:06 ) for the lighthouse painted like a barber pole
Folks don’t come for a haircut or shave to this house that’s tucked into a nave of a rocky coastline but I think it’s divine to save most from a watery grave. Love it, Larry! heheheh My own meager effort might be: This painter had white paint and red; Let’s paint up a lighthouse he said. Red stripes on pure white, The beacon flashed bright, “Get shave’n haircuts, two bits per head!”
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Aug 12 17, 03:41
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I will give this some thought for a sonnet; the painting's now under my bonnet. I can hear Larry say while he's looking this way, "I will swear that I knew he would don it!"
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Aug 16 17, 13:56
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and on a more serious note...
Sentinels
An ember gleams upon horizon’s lip when sighted through the fog on stormy seas and slowly, it becomes a fingertip that points from rocky promontory’s keys
to safer shores. An alabaster spear will pierce the darkest night. Miasma’s heart is torn asunder like a sailor’s fear that dissipates with light and will impart
a sense of ease. This stolid knight will stand on guard, dressed in his comic uniform of candied stripes. On every shore his band will warn of danger, keeping all from harm.
A sentinel and shrine for those who brave the ocean’s depth; a shield from briny grave.
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Aug 17 17, 14:33
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QUOTE (Larry @ Aug 16 17, 14:56 ) and on a more serious note...
Sentinels
An ember gleams upon horizon’s lip (horizon's lip is a great metaphor) when sighted through the fog on stormy seas and slowly, it becomes a fingertip (same with fingertip) that points from rocky promontory’s keys
to safer shores. An alabaster spear ( great image) will pierce the darkest night. Miasma’s heart (unsure about Miasma. As in " miasma of fear"? is torn asunder like a sailor’s fear that dissipates with light and will impart
a sense of ease. This stolid knight will stand on guard, dressed in his comic uniform of candied stripes. On every shore his band will warn of danger, keeping all from harm.
A sentinel and shrine for those who brave the ocean’s depth; a shield from briny grave. A fine sonnet, Larry. I'm not sure about Miasma's heart. I love what the stolid knight's colored stripes signify. Pressed on time, I'll need to come back. Offhand, except for Miasma's heart (sounds like a proper noun, which you may have intended, lol,) I find no nits. Ali
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Aug 19 17, 21:40
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Hey Ali,
If you will notice in the stanza above "Miasma", I used the word fog which is what Websters' defines as a murk, miasma, thick haze, etc.. Not wanting to be redundant, I used a different word. Besides, it matched the metrical flow of the sonnet.
Glad you enjoyed.
Larry
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Aug 20 17, 06:31
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QUOTE (Larry @ Aug 19 17, 21:40 ) Hey Ali,
If you will notice in the stanza above "Miasma", I used the word fog which is what Websters' defines as a murk, miasma, thick haze, etc.. Not wanting to be redundant, I used a different word. Besides, it matched the metrical flow of the sonnet.
Glad you enjoyed.
Larry Hi Larry; actually, in the given context "miasma" does work quite well. As said before, no nits. I wonder where our friend Eagle-eye Daniel might be these days? Greetings to him and all the other absentees. Take care, Ali
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