Hi Antony,
Should the first line be 'It's about an angry seed'?
Anyway, I feel it would be more direct/concise to start
An angry seed blew in range. It got impatient for permanent change
It about an angry seed that blew in range. How it got impatient for permanent change. Wants to impair your DNA, roll you over for all your worth, Eventually tell your children what they didn’t need to know The helplessness of generational inheritance
I like the idea here but think it is a bit telly. Show don't tell
Eira
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