 Autumn's Recess [title revised June 15, 2010], formerly known as After Summer Showers |
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 Assyrian  Posts: 262 Joined: 4-February 09 Member No.: 756 Real Name: Robin DeWalt Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Winning Writer's web site  |
I don't really care
if pennies in the air give me bride of Frankie hair, or if the wind with OCD keeps coming back to check on me. See raindrops bounce on trampolines of vivid gold and emerald green and pirate-squirrels get back to work hiding treasure in the dirt. But what I like the most beside the split-rail posts are flowers bent and bowed beneath the watchful clouds, like sinners in a pew- I find I'm praying too. * Changed the word 'patchwork' to 'watchful', and added punctuation. Thank you Cleo. *I could really use some help on this one. I know my form and punctuation are off but not sure how to correct them. And I don't like the word 'patchwork' but all my mind kept coming up with were cliches! ·······  ······· |
  
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merle Autumn's Recess [title revised June 15, 2010] May 31 10, 04:01 
merle Hi Cleo -
Thanks for the thumbs-up and typing rev... Jun 14 10, 14:56 heartsong7 Merle,
I rather liked the wonderful imagery of ... Jun 14 10, 16:30 merle Hi Sue -
I do apologize, I did miss your earlier ... Jun 14 10, 23:06 Cleo_Serapis Hmmmm = how about 'quilted' instead of pat... Jun 15 10, 05:24 heartsong7 "not too sure of 'leafy greens', kind... Jun 15 10, 09:42 merle Hello Cleo & Sue -
Ok, ok ..I'll keep ... Jun 15 10, 13:57 heartsong7 I vote for "Autumn's Recess" because... Jun 15 10, 14:47 
merle Hi Sue -
I'm off to revise the title. Thank ... Jun 15 10, 15:56 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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