Hello Liz,
Thanks for transporting me to Cambodia's world in an image-filled way!
I've enjoyed the trip, and your poetic words and devices are well managed - assonance, alliteration, inner rhymes and rhythm.
I don't mind the repetition throughout in L1 of each verse, however I would swap them to rid that 'of' so the first would read:
Cambodian Jungles: or
Cambodia's Jungles: and then maintain that throughout, e.g. Cambodian Mountains, etc. for consistency. I enjoyed this walk though the land and have made a few comments below for you to ponder.
Cheers
~Cleo
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Plains and paddies of Cambodia:
you grant sustenance
to people of the land,
where once
were killing fields
and [where] baby's blood
was soldier's pay.
This stanza had me a tad confused so I've offered it in a slightly different way.Horrors of Cambodia:
some linger yet
beneath the verdant plains
to steal another leg
or arm or life
time and time again.
Graphic without the need to describe the gore - well done!Temples of Cambodia:
you speak of a mystic past
that hovers still[;]
and haunts the walls
and winding corridors
to whisper of its wants.
Nice inner rhymes and assonance. My favorite stanza! Kingdom of Cambodia:
now heal your broken dreams
and shine once more
in golden splendor
for all the world to
see [witness]. (alternate for alliteration)