Hi Robyn,
Powerful poem. Strong images to heighten a strong intent. Great title. Works on several levels. I especially felt the final line was a powerful punch, the use of opague eyes created an emotional confession of sorts. (not specifically personal to the narrator / poet, but rather the reader that can put herself / himself in this role.) The poem speaks to many on different levels and that's your hit within the poem.
Some very minor suggestions, please use what helps you and lose what does not.
Best Wishes, Liz
WHEN PUSH COMES TO SHOVE
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Again, GREAT TITLE!
It's much easier to lie submissively
underneath your heaviness,
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I would suggest omitting 'Much' as it felt filler, sometimes less is more. and perhaps line break at 'lie' to give power to the duality of the word. "LIE" hanging at the end, brings forth two intentions the lie of the experience, and to lie underneath ...
my silence curling around your silhouette
and bumping against the ceiling,
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I would also suggest allowing "my silence' (line break thereafter) it's own line, to enhance that alone image - to offer more authority to the narrators silence -
rather than to believe God
created me through opaque eyes.
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Wonderful ending lines. Powerful and intriguing.
Best Regards, Liz