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 Greek  Posts: 698 Joined: 29-May 06 From: US East Coast Member No.: 185 Real Name: Peggy Harwood Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:just wandered in  |
( I think "life's" gets rid of the gender specific problem, don't you? I hated using "his" as it excluded feminine gender.)
Descendents (Revision 2) Descendents, one's hope for life's immortality in this mortal world. Peggy Carpenter Harwood Decendents (Revision 1) Decendents, one's hope for his immortality in this mortal world. Peggy Carpenter Harwood Decendents Decendents, our hope for our immortality in this mortal world. Peggy Carpenter Harwood ·······  ······· |
  
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Peggy Carpenter Harwood Descendents (Revision 2 30 Sep 08 Tweaked) Sep 28 08, 17:37 
ohsteve Peggy, very good image and message both, our child... Sep 28 08, 18:39 Dee The message is clear and it's a good one, one ... Sep 28 08, 22:28 Arnfinn Hi, Peg
Decendents
Decendents, our hope
for our... Sep 29 08, 06:19 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Steve,
Thanks so much for reading !! ... Sep 29 08, 08:33 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Dee,
Thanks so much for reading and commenting... Sep 29 08, 08:36 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi John,
Thanks so much for reading and commentin... Sep 29 08, 08:39 Cleo_Serapis Hi Peggy,
Definitely a good read, one I've po... Sep 29 08, 19:36 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Cleo,
Thanks for the good suggestion! I... Sep 29 08, 20:14 Cleo_Serapis Excellent!
Peggy! Sep 30 08, 07:26 Arnfinn Nah, not soooo keen, Peg.
First we have = Descend... Sep 30 08, 08:59 Peggy Carpenter Harwood HI John,
Women are used to changing last names. ... Sep 30 08, 13:15 ohsteve Peggy, Good on ya, I have heard there is a trend f... Sep 30 08, 15:22 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi folks,
I inserted "life's" in pl... Oct 23 08, 18:52 Cleo_Serapis Hi Peggy,
Personally, I prefer His (in reference ... Oct 24 08, 05:38 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Cleo,
Thanks so much for responding!! ... Oct 24 08, 06:44 Larry Peggy,
Might I suggest changing "decendents... Nov 7 08, 08:19 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Larry,
Thanks so much for stopping by, reading... Nov 7 08, 08:46 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Larry,
After thinking about it, I believe you ... Nov 7 08, 19:07 prerna bala hi everybody! this place is great, cannot beli... Nov 30 08, 09:50 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi prerna,
Welcome to Mosaic Musing!!... Dec 2 08, 19:43 Larry Hello Peggy,
Loved your revision except for one p... Dec 4 08, 15:40 
Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Larry,
I looked it up in Merriam Webster's... Dec 4 08, 16:37 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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