Haiku or not, Wizard Award ~ haiku without season Options

[Terocon101]

4th version

a soft kiss
upon my skin
snowflake

With special thanks to Lary, Cleo, Liz and Snow.

3rd version

softly as snowfall
she kisses, I feel it not
cool upon my skin

2nd version

Softly like snowfall
she kisses, I feel it not
cold upon my skin

1st version

Softly so softly
you kiss me, I felt it not
not upon my skin

[4rum]

Hey Terry...

I think when contemplating a new discipline, one should study the accepted variations on the forms then decide on one widely accepted form in that discipline. Haiku, senryu, sonnet or villanell, there are different variations of these and almost every form known. We will have to decide how truly traditional we want our poem to be and then it would save us much time and grief to give a brief description of the form we use.

Most scholars of strict Japanese haiku maintain the 17 sylables, 5-7-5, a reference to season, NO reference to human qualities etc... BUT then there are those who find exception and allow many variations. We will always encounter both persuasions, strict disciplined writers and more permissive folks. It might be advantagous to add a note or a link giving reference to the style we choose.

Personally I feel it is good to learn one, very strict discipline of any form we choose. Once we have learned to do it "proper" then we may wish to experiment.

Very nice work, I won't try to classify it, others have done that better than I could already.

[Terocon101]

Hi Sam,

firstly, it's a pleasure to meet you and welcome

I'm sure you will enjoy it here.

Thanks for your response and for sharing your opinion with me on the 'proper' and 'traditional' practice of writing.
I both agree and totally disagree with with you, "..one should study the accepted variations on the forms then decide on one widely accepted form in that discipline."
Why should one choose just 'one' form, or why should it be the 'widely accepted' one??
Each to their own, choose what you like... or don't, whatever.

Of course I have begun study of the Japanese short forms..it is a lifetimes task and I relish it. Although I personally do not like to place constraints on myself when it comes to writing or any art-form I experiment with. I still enjoy 'ku's with their abundance of rules and constraints, many of which are very hard to explain and really have to be felt and grasped by the writer.

Its a pleasure to discuss this with you and I look forward to reading your offerings and forther interaction.

Terry