Hibiscus Magic Options

[Orion]

My toes didn't care
if last night's leftover rains
drenched them on this early morning

walk to the middle
of that glorious hibiscus
whispering, wooingly, to the
camera-woman,

"Put your coffee cup down - now;
pick up your camera!"

The backyard trip was
well worth soaked sandals
and feet - and ankles -
traipsing in blades,
wispy, wet, swaying.

What was this calling about?
Moved me from my cozy kitchen
to see delicate beauty
through mesmerized lens-

{click}

little bee in bee heaven,
bee toes pollen-dipped in
piles of snow-white

{click}

If a bee could have
smiled, I know this
bee was grinning for
a quick shot.

Left a wondering me -
who was happier
the saturated photographer
or the pollinated bee?

[Orion]

Hello Terry,

Thank you for revisiting this romp through my backyard to see Nature's delightful design~which always captures the writer in me. I think maybe some of the 'questionable phrasing' within this poem is due to my southern locale. Just maybe. *grin*

I will look into your suggestions as they redirect thoughts of reconstruction, should I choose to do so. As always, I do appreciate your ideas which could possibly enhance this work. My motive is to keep this simple in word design & feeling, which you have verified already. Again, 1,000 thank you's for your time/recommendations here.

Regards,
Jan