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 Babylonian  Posts: 88 Joined: 7-March 07 From: United States Member No.: 409 Real Name: Brenda Nixon Cook Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Sampo  |
The Plight of the Mockingbird
sing-song sang mockingbird I long for my own song not one borrowed from another song-sing ·······  ·······MM Award Winner
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Jun 17 07, 14:12
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Bebe.
One variation I heard recently was that these must be in iambic meter. I think these look better center-aligned IMHO. While reading this, I guess my nits are that I got a bit tongue-tied and assume your repeat of words is intentional? With so few words to use in this form, I'm not certain if it works? I take away from this that this individual wants to be unique, so offer a few alternates to take or toss as you wish. chirps for sang in L2 and for L3 & 4: I long to hear my song singly performed like no other Enjoyed! ~Cleo 
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bbnixon The Plight of the Mockingbird Jun 14 07, 20:01 
Terocon101 sing-song
sang (a)mockingbird Maybe insert ... Jun 15 07, 19:21 
bbnixon Hi Terry,
Yes sad for the mockingbird..perhaps...... Jun 16 07, 08:41 Terocon101 Yes sad for the mockingbird..perhaps...just a thou... Jun 16 07, 11:24 bbnixon Terry,
Lots of variation...formal and more inform... Jun 16 07, 12:05 Terocon101 http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cinquain
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