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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 2,587 Joined: 9-August 03 From: Australia Member No.: 17 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry  |
A few weeks ago Pam and I spent a few days in Canberra. Our venue for breakfast was the hotel’s restaurant, Bobbie McGee’s. One morning whilst we were eating breakfast I noticed a puny macho business man sitting at a table on my left. Later a stunning young redheaded woman sat opposite the man, who was obviously a company executive.
Breakfast at Bobbie McGee’s He sat on the other side, though his head was somewhere between the third button on her green blouse and half parted pink lips. A red headed beauty; a babe crawling amongst old growth— next weeks work performance topic around a company board table. She, at her plate, Green eyed, neck flounced ringlets, shaped white linen from waist to knee. Unpainted fingers cuddling curved handles. He mouthed sideways, phone mid shoulder and ear: expression for impression— mind on the evenings project. He winked and gave a sickly smile. Arnfinn ·······  ·······Arnfinn
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Sep 7 06, 07:41
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 19,923 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Wanted ya to know I was at the next table watching you watch, John...
Good observations. I'll be watchin' others help ya with this; I'm about to lead a group and have a bunch of paperwork I have to complete first... so I can't stay and have coffee with ya. I love your observations! Ya have a couple apostrophes missin' for the possessives, and maybe one place that oughta be hyphenated, but that's just detail stuff. I'll be back for or a meal in the next 24 hours, I hope! deLightin' in yer writin', Daniel  P.S. Was it jest 'is eyes?  ... an' was Pam watchin' yers? 
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Arnfinn Breakfast at Bobbie McGee’s Sep 7 06, 06:12 
Arnfinn QUOTE(JustDaniel @ Sep 7 06, 12:41 ) 8272... Sep 9 06, 23:57 
ohsteve I think that I could have been sittin' at the ... Sep 7 06, 08:58 Arnfinn QUOTE(ohsteve @ Sep 7 06, 13:58 ) 82730I ... Sep 10 06, 00:03 azurepoetry Hi John,
And here i was thinking this would relat... Sep 7 06, 09:51 Arnfinn QUOTE(azurepoetry @ Sep 7 06, 14:51 ) 827... Sep 10 06, 00:47 duetsdove QUOTE(Arnfinn @ Sep 7 06, 07:12 ) 82715A ... Sep 7 06, 14:32 Arnfinn QUOTE(duetsdove @ Sep 7 06, 19:32 ) 82741... Sep 10 06, 02:57 Cyn i also read 'head' literally instead of mi... Sep 7 06, 15:02 Arnfinn QUOTE(Cyn @ Sep 7 06, 20:02 ) 82744i also... Sep 10 06, 03:29 Gregory John, this was a scene from a movie it seems. Only... Sep 8 06, 10:23 Arnfinn QUOTE(Gregory @ Sep 8 06, 15:23 ) 82796Jo... Sep 10 06, 04:26 azurepoetry Hi John,
QUOTEshe was a first tripper, she didn... Sep 10 06, 01:03 Arnfinn QUOTE(azurepoetry @ Sep 10 06, 06:03 ) 82... Sep 12 06, 01:42 Eisa LOL! -- oh I love this one
I haven't r... Sep 10 06, 04:26 Arnfinn QUOTE(Eisa @ Sep 10 06, 09:26 ) 82906LOL... Sep 12 06, 02:22 Eisa Hi John
Nah, what I was trying say I spose, was t... Sep 12 06, 18:20 Gregory John, I was a little harsh I admit with my crit
... Sep 14 06, 06:49 Arnfinn Hi Gregory,
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