Musical Seduction :sunny: Options

[Guest_Nina_*]

Musical Seduction   (revised)

Crystal-pure notes,
filtered on zephyrs,
swirl through
sun-dappled trees.

Mesmerising melody
entices me, unresisting,
into forest’s secret glade.

Tendrils of harmony
coil around my being;
draw me into your arms;
weave a shared destiny.

As music spins enchantment,
we spiral upwards:
an inter-twined,
shimmering presence,
whirling into infinity.




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Musical Seduction (original)

Crystal-pure notes,
carried on the breeze,
swirl through
sun-dappled trees.

Mesmerising melody
entices me, unresisting,
into forest’s secret glade.

Tendrils of harmony
coil around my being;
draw me into your arms;
weave a shared destiny.

As music spins enchantment,
we spiral upwards:
an inter-twined,
shimmering presence,
whirling into infinity.

© Nina  2006

Nina

[Cleo_Serapis]

Hi Nina.

What a lovely melody on the melody of a seduction. You've certainly drwn me into your rhythms here.  :lovie:

This is simply beautiful!  :cloud9:

Crystal-pure notes,
filtered on zephyrs,
swirl through
sun-dappled trees.
Love this opening - puts me visually into a crisp outdoor setting where breezes blow.

Mesmerising melody
entices me, unresisting,
into forest’s secret glade.
My only nit here is the singular: melody - I want to say "melodies" entice me - the idea of a secret place is very calming.

Tendrils of harmony
coil around my being;
draw me into your arms;
weave a shared destiny.
This is so beautiful - each word draws to the next and visa vie. "coil around my being - cool!  :hsdance:

As music spins enchantment,
we spiral upwards:
an inter-twined,
shimmering presence,
whirling into infinity.
a very strong, succinct and beautious end!

Wish I could stay in this magical place a tad longer.
A beauty Nina!  :cloud9:

~Cleo  :rose: