A Visit, ballade metre with internal rhyme Options

[jgdittier]

A point of light, the jets fire bright,     change fire to flare
we sail the universe.
Those lights we see- our galaxy!        change those lights to the glow
In zillion stars, immersed.

On our return, our "world" will learn
of lesser life in space.
Our visit took a second look.
They are a different race.

The life we met had no flight yet,*
They chose to stare in awe.
When our ship docked, they all flocked, change they all to a huge crowd
entranced by all they saw.
*intergalactic

Their age was stone and that alone
was used when time to build.
We taught them math, the stellar path;
for we are wise and skilled.

They bowed to us and made such fuss    keeping the u sound
as though we were divine.
I'll not deny, was with a sigh,
but their thought, never mine.

We do not know how much they'll "grow".
We saw them near to birth.
I'll no more roam, I'm headed home.
"Goodbye" to planet Earth.

[Guest_Nina_*]

Hi Ron

This is a fascinating viewpoint of aliens visiting earth from outer space.  What would Stone Age man have thought of spaceships appearing in the sky, probably that they were gods.

I liked the idea that the aliens were more advanced than humans but I think they'd be shocked to return to earth today and saw how we have used the knowledge acquired, since we are destroying the planet, using up all its resources.  The world is a much more violent place since the invention of guns and knives.

I enjoyed the poem but can't really offer suggestions as it would wreck your form.

Thanks for the read

Nina