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Aug 14 05, 14:46
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Real Name: Lori Kanter
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Aug 16 05, 05:06
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Hi Nina,
Your second fab poem which I've read today - you certainly have full steam up (groan!)
The mass evacuation of children from London in WWII was a sensible precaution but the mass destruction which was feared was less severe to London, thankfully (though that wouldn't help if one was a casualty, of course). HMG also evacuated as part of its programme to make people be aware of the war (the first year was known as "The Phoney War" as little happened in the UK - it was followed by The Blitz and The Battle of Britain, though (Talk about lull before the storm).
I had in mind a simple time-travel idea for my Pandora - where the train is just the vehicle - literal and metaphorical - to transport one back in time. But your poem actually uses the train and the centre-piece of the work and has me wondering about trains. (I have not travelled on that many steam trains). Just using the train as a transport to the past seems inadequate now so I'm thinking around.
I know this isn't a crit forum but, even if it were, there isn't much - if anything - to suggest here. Lori is absolutely right - each word is beautifully employed... as with your Tempest poem. If I were you I'd write as many poems as I could spare the time for now - you've hit an especially golden patch by the look of it.
OK I'm waffling. I have nowt to say really, apart from this really is brill. I don't feel we're in competition but I do feel you've set the standard very high indeed.
Well done and thanks for the read.
J.
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Cleo_Serapis Cross Country Train Trip (Image challenge) Aug 14 05, 14:46 Cleo_Serapis I forgot to mention that responses to this challen... Aug 15 05, 15:58 Nina Hi Lori
Here is the picture that came into my min... Aug 15 05, 16:09 Cleo_Serapis Wow Nina.
This is excellent response to the pi... Aug 15 05, 17:42 Nina Hi Lori
This is excellent response to the picture... Aug 15 05, 23:33 Cleo_Serapis QUOTE (Nina @ Aug. 16 2005, 00:33)Hi Lori
Go... Aug 16 05, 05:31 Nina Hi J
Your second fab poem which I've read tod... Aug 16 05, 07:40 Jox Hi Nina,
Thanks for your kind comments.
I don... Aug 16 05, 07:51 Nina Hi J
I don't know that tv programme, no, sorr... Aug 16 05, 07:56 Cybele Hi Nina,
What a great response and I remember s... Aug 16 05, 07:59 Nina Hi Grace
What a great response and I remember so ... Aug 16 05, 08:27 Jox © Mike Gable, 2005. I, Mike Gable, do assert my ri... Aug 16 05, 09:20 Nina Hi J
You paint a vivid picture of a child's u... Aug 16 05, 11:57 Jox Hi Nina,
Yes, he's in Leicester nick. These a... Aug 16 05, 12:17 Jox Anyone else care to have a go? Aug 17 05, 03:33 Cleo_Serapis QUOTE (Jox @ Aug. 16 2005, 10:20)Ref: MG 0455... Aug 17 05, 11:31 Cathy Seeking Better Life
Worn shoes hurry along,
nearl... Aug 26 05, 23:20 Toumai Gosh, I missed all this cos of being away. I shall... Aug 27 05, 03:22 Nina Hi Cathy
Great response to the challenge. S... Aug 27 05, 04:05 Jox Hi Cathy,
I think Nina has said what I would wish... Aug 27 05, 04:43 Cathy Hi Fran,
QUOTE Wow, what fantastic responses. Wel... Aug 27 05, 08:27 Cathy Hi Nina,
QUOTE Great response to the challenge. ... Aug 27 05, 08:31 Cathy Hi James,
QUOTE think Nina has said what I would ... Aug 27 05, 08:35 Jox Hi Cathy,
Although I have no emotional feelings f... Aug 27 05, 09:03 Ephiny The responses to this beautiful picture are amazin... Aug 31 05, 06:25 Cleo_Serapis QUOTE (Cathy @ Aug. 27 2005, 00:20)Seeking Be... Aug 31 05, 15:55 Cleo_Serapis Lucie, your poem is really very poignant.
I am i... Aug 31 05, 15:59 Nina Hi Lucie
A very powerful response to the photogra... Aug 31 05, 16:23 ohsteve Take the morning train from Shippea Hill,
and chan... Dec 7 05, 19:38 Nina Hi Steve
Well done with this response to the phot... Feb 10 06, 02:06 Jox Hi Steve -
A well-written response to the challe... Feb 10 06, 03:44 Cleo_Serapis Well done Steve - I enjoyed your trip muchly!
I... Feb 10 06, 06:44 ohsteve Ah but Jox I was a civilian when I got married... ... Feb 10 06, 15:18 Nina Hi Steve
What a lovely story
Nina Feb 10 06, 15:24
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