A Poet in the World of Reality Options

[Guest_Toumai_*]

A Poet in the World of Reality

Poets muse,
waiting:
for inspiration,
enlightenment,
perfection.

I’m impatient,
gossiping
outside school:
road works,
celebrities,
holiday horrors.

Poets feel.

I am touched by:
sunburn,
beggars,
gastric ’flu.

Poets notice:
prismatic sunbeams,
striking gossamer;
rainbow magic.

I wonder where
sodding scary spiders
crouch, waiting;
spinning in the shadows
menacing my existence.
So much debris;
so much fear.

Poets brave
the unimaginable:
writing it ...

I take:
children to school,
cat to vet,
recycling to dump,
offence ... too easily.

Poets take:
liberties,
lovers,
drugs,
forever deciding
where to place one ...
    full
         Stop
                .

© Toumai, 2005

Thanks, James, for much-needed pre-crit

[Cybele]

[b]


Good morning Fran,

This is a very interesting concept between classic poets and a modern day 'mum' poet. Quite intriguing! The higher plains of thought and the rushed existence of the modern world are very well contrasted here.

I wonder where
sodding scary spiders
crouch, waiting;
spinning in the shadows
menacing my existence.
So much debris;
so much fear.

I think the injection of the word 'sodding' here adds to the rushed, harried feeling of a housewife and mother's feelings of frustration.

Poets take:
liberties,
lovers,
drugs,
forever deciding
where to place one ...
   full
        Stop
               .

Like the line break and positioning of the full stop Fran, most amusing!  

If you mean poets such as Byron or Coleridge et al, then I think the word 'drugs' would be better as 'opiates', since they did not mainline or snort or whatever,~ but drank tinctures of opium (Laudenum), or smoked pipes of opium . In which case it would be 'Poets took': As it stands it might indicate that most poets take drugs .

I was expecting a last comparison Fran. Since you write from the points of view alternatively, then the natural sequence would end with the here and now. I think a final comparison would finish this off nicely. It could even be a funny comparison, since I was smiling at the mother's reactions (whether you intended that or not.)