Voice in the Dark, a LogaRhyme Options

[JustDaniel]

Voice in the Dark

I’m feeling He’s abandoned me;
a spiral down won’t set me free...
I need to cling,
remembering, when I’ve no sight,
the things He’s shown me in the light...
in darkness, sing.

“How can you sing!” a voice may blare.
“It’s obvious He doesn’t care;
just face the facts.”
Amid the drone of dark despair,
a still, small Voice is always there;
on this I act.

God is near the broken-hearted,
hears before a prayer is started...
been there too...
near the one whose spirit’s crushed;
“I’ll never leave you.”  List now… hushed...
He cries with you.

© Daniel J Ricketts 03 Feb 2005
Psalm 34:18

[Siren]

Hello Daniel,

Because I can relate to this, it has hit me deeply. Ofcourse your style is a booster to that impact. :)

There's a lot in this that works very well. You know me with meter, so what I offer isn't based on knowledge only on what reads smoothly to me, Ok?

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Amid the drone of dark despair,

This line made me stumble a bit. It felt heavy in contrast to the smoothness of the rest of the flow here.

That's just my impression, otherwise, this is a topic I've come to enjoy mostly because my step towards God has gotten closer and I'm relishing the feeling of it. :)

Thanks for sharing it and as always a great read.

Hugs
Dani