|
The Dance of Death, A sparrow's tale |
|
|
|
Sep 14 03, 15:19
|

Mosaic Master

Group: Administrator
Posts: 18,892
Joined: 1-August 03
From: Massachusetts
Member No.: 2
Real Name: Lori Kanter
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:Imhotep

|
The Dance of Death
Their pitch was harsh, the sound was weak, a nest was hidden high. The woods were full of creature-speak ignored by passersby.
A few were round, and some were slight, concealed among the trees, by parents pausing in their flight, upon Spring’s warming breeze.
A sparrow brave, petite and frail once perched with weary claw - was swept away by Nature’s gale and snatched by prowler’s paw.
The kill so swift, his silenced call a sacrifice for hatch; and broken wing, to mark his fall, lay tattered in the thatch.
The clutch remained in warm domain, their flock reduced by one, to face the harshness and the strain of lives they’ve just begun.
The seeds were sown, to take first flight on wings of bated breath, albeit soon, with all their might descend the dance of death.
© 2003 Lorraine M Kanter
·······  ·······
"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner 
|
|
|
|
|
 |
Replies
|
Sep 14 03, 15:43
|
Group: Gold Member
Posts: 1,250
Joined: 2-August 03
From: USA
Member No.: 7
Writer of: Poetry

|
QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Sep. 14 2003, 15:19) The Dance of Death
Their pitch was harsh, the sound was weak, a nest was hidden high. The woods were full of creature-speak ignored by passersby.
A few were round, and some were slight, concealed among the trees, by parents pausing in their flight, upon Spring’s warming breeze.
A sparrow brave, petite and frail once perched with weary claw - was swept away by Nature’s gale and snatched by prowler’s paw.
The kill so swift, his silenced call a sacrifice for hatch; and broken wing, to mark his fall, lay tattered in the thatch.
The clutch remained in warm domain, their flock reduced by one, to face the harshness and the strain of lives they’ve just begun.
The seeds were sown, to take first flight on wings of bated breath, albeit soon, with all their might descend the dance of death.
© 2003 Lorraine M Kanter Hello Cleo~
This is such a "stunning" poem, displaying the beauty of nature.
A wonderful and dramatic piece written very well.
TTFN~
Aphrodite~Lindi
·······  ·······
|
|
|
|
Posts in this topic
Cleo_Serapis The Dance of Death Sep 14 03, 15:19 Eisa Hi Lori
I love nature poems and this one is no ex... Sep 24 03, 19:10 Jox Now why didn't Charles Darwin express himself ... Sep 28 03, 07:29 Don Your "The Dance of Death" is excellent, Cleo_Serap... Oct 5 03, 07:29 Cleo_Serapis QUOTE (Eisa @ Sep. 24 2003, 20:10)Hi Lori
I ... Oct 6 03, 13:28 Cleo_Serapis QUOTE (Jox @ Sep. 28 2003, 08:29)Now why didn... Oct 6 03, 13:30 Cleo_Serapis QUOTE (Don @ Oct. 05 2003, 08:29)Your "The Da... Oct 6 03, 13:33 Hi Lori
Nature red eh? There isn't anything t... Oct 15 03, 09:47 Cybele Hello Cleo
A very strong, dramatic, beautifully ... Oct 17 03, 10:34 Cleo_Serapis QUOTE (AkhenhatenII @ Oct. 15 2003, 10:47)Hi ... Oct 19 03, 10:18 Cleo_Serapis QUOTE (Cybele @ Oct. 17 2003, 11:34)Hello Cle... Oct 19 03, 10:20 Aggiel Lori,
I follow you right behind on this nature tr... Oct 23 04, 04:12 Cleo_Serapis QUOTE (Aggiel @ Oct. 23 2004, 05:12)Lori,
I ... Oct 27 04, 05:21 jgdittier Dear Lori,
For me, the essence of poetry is meter.... Nov 8 04, 17:23 Cleo_Serapis QUOTE (jgdittier @ Nov. 08 2004, 17:23)Dear L... Nov 11 04, 06:31 Nefertiti Hello, Miss Cleo.
Yes, it's Nef resurrected y... Mar 24 05, 21:42 Cleo_Serapis Oh boy oh boy oh boy!
NEF IS RESURRECTED AGAIN> W... Apr 4 05, 18:04 Siren Hey Lori,
This reminded of a poem I wrote when I ... Jun 10 05, 20:21
1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
0 Members:
|
  |
Read our FLYERS - click below
Reference links provided to aid in fine-tuning
your writings. ENJOY!
|
|
|
|