Dear A, Treat me to a poem with a cadence like /-/-/-/ and you'll be entertaining me. I think it's the perfect choice and sets up the reader for a message that's both light and bittersweet. My only nit is with the first line where I'd consider inserting merrily, joyfully or gracefully, etc. for "peaceful air". I'm of the old school and find no problem in what now are inaccuracies or inadequate descriptions. Thus, perhaps only I, find no problem with the closing "greenery" as I feel the message. I'll never master the difference between poetry and prose and have taken to believing that as modern poetry moves ever closer to prose, it loses much of its elegance. Your "Undertones" is definitely poetry. Cheers, jgd
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