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Aug 30 03, 09:33
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The Rondeau consists of three stanzas, a quintet (5 lines), a quatrain (4 lines) and a sestet (6 lines), making the poem a total of 15 lines.
The first phrase of the first line usually sets the refrain ®, but sometimes the refrain can be the whole of the first line. The structure is:
line 1 - a ®(normally the first phrase is the refrain) line 2 - a line 3 - b line 4 - b line 5 - a
line 6 - a line 7 - a line 8 - b line 9 - R
line 10 - a line 11 - a line 12 - b line 13 - b line 14 - a line 15 - R
The meter is considered be open and the French style is not bound by a rhyming pattern and also is more of a light and buoyant even "flashy" form of poetry which uses short lines. The English style however, is much more dour and serious, even meditative and uses tetrameter or pentameter.
An excellent example of the English Rondeau form by Lt. Col. John McCrae, M.D., 1872-1918 follows:
In Flanders Fields
In Flanders fields the poppies blow Between the crosses, row on row, That mark our place; and in the sky The larks, still bravely singing, fly Scarce heard amid the guns below.
We are the Dead. Short days ago We lived, felt dawn, saw sunset glow, Loved, and were loved, and now we lie In Flanders fields.
Take up our quarrel with the foe: To you from failing hands we throw The torch; be yours to hold it high. If ye break faith with us who die We shall not sleep, though poppies grow In Flanders fields.
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Oct 9 22, 17:51
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wild horses in early morning sun
In early morning sun they splash unchecked by bridle, bit nor sash. While most of us are sound asleep they gallop, saunter, bound and leap consuming energy they've cached
enjoying freedom as they thrash through shallow waters – skip and dash near shore where water’s not so deep in early morning sun.
And as they run, they seldom clash nor fight nor snarl with teeth that gnash They’ve no appointments they must keep so joy in leisure as they sweep the beach and simply have a bash in early morning sun.
© MLee Dickens’son 2022 Daniel J Ricketts
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