Faded Layers, Wizard Award Winner Options

[Eisa]

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Celtic Castle Designs

Faded Layers


I frown at my reflection wistfully
and recognise my bloom’s become debris.
Instead, my mother gazes back; in truth,
maturity replaced my tender youth.
Soft silk has been exchanged for crinkled crepe
to shroud my inmost self. I can’t escape
from Time’s persistent pace, for she’s designed
this puckered faded fashion, so maligned.


Time’s fingers frayed my visage … I accept
the ravages she wreaked, for they reflect
life’s stormy waters, where no calm appears
to shape persona through tempestuous tears.
I rummage through the rustiness of life
to trace the winding tracks that turn to strife.
Determination’s pushed me to pursue
my problems, hiding battle scars from view.


As seasons change, I face them …  unafraid
of Time's relentless tides and facial raids.
Inside I may be bruised with wounds from war,
yet I’ve survived to stretch my wings and soar.
So mirror image, though you may displease
when dusty covers are removed; just ease
my faded layers back to look behind …
a stronger fabric shows … my mellow mind!

[Eisa]

Hi Snow!  

I find this piece well crafted. The debate is interesting - perhaps one of the guys will open a thread in the Debate forum for further discussion?

Anyway, I've been meaning to critique, and will come back to do so!  

In the meanwhile, "Your piece is your own, and when you are comfortable with the results, that's all that matters in the end."

Hugs!

~Cleo

Hi Lori

Sorry I'm a little  late coming back here.

Yes this would be a good subject for debate if Alan or Don would like to open a thread, it would be interesting to find out other people's opinions. :pharoah2

I agree, if the writer feels comfotable with what they've written at the end...that is what really counts.

Thanks and hugs

Snow  :lovie: