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 Jan 21 18, 13:24
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 20,402 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori  |
self-reflective senryu series
What does my life show? Is Truth I'm set apart to communicated? My Home is elsewhere; does that show in what I do and things I cling to? Do my actions speak? show that God, who surrounds me, is completely Good? Do I manifest God's providential greatness? My trust in Him clear? Can my fear of Him be seen in the ways I act? His Word outweighs mine. Is God's Grace to me obvious in life's courtroom? My striving falls short. © MLeeDickens'son 2018 during sermon challenge ·······  ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 2,587 Joined: 9-August 03 From: Australia Member No.: 17 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry |
Quite a sermon there Daniel. Every section passes the 5-7-5 test Situation. Where What When An accomplishment. Regards, John ······· ·······Arnfinn
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JustDaniel self-reflective senryu series Jan 21 18, 13:24 
Larry Hey Daniel,
Don’t know if you wanted any critique... Jan 23 18, 12:16 JustDaniel Hey, Larry...
I've modified my entry to indic... Jan 23 18, 13:56 Larry Hi Daniel,
Glad my crits didn't cause you to ... Jan 23 18, 18:54 
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