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Feb 26 04, 04:53
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Faded Layers
I frown at my reflection wistfully and recognise my bloom’s become debris. Instead, my mother gazes back; in truth, maturity replaced my tender youth. Soft silk has been exchanged for crinkled crepe to shroud my inmost self. I can’t escape from Time’s persistent pace, for she’s designed this puckered faded fashion, so maligned.
Time’s fingers frayed my visage … I accept the ravages she wreaked, for they reflect life’s stormy waters, where no calm appears to shape persona through tempestuous tears. I rummage through the rustiness of life to trace the winding tracks that turn to strife. Determination’s pushed me to pursue my problems, hiding battle scars from view.
As seasons change, I face them … unafraid of Time's relentless tides and facial raids. Inside I may be bruised with wounds from war, yet I’ve survived to stretch my wings and soar. So mirror image, though you may displease when dusty covers are removed; just ease my faded layers back to look behind … a stronger fabric shows … my mellow mind!
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Apr 11 04, 17:21
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QUOTE(Alan @ April 11 2004, 16:36) Dear Don,
It's NOT possessive !
I frown at my reflection wistfully and recognise my bloom’s become debris. = my bloom HAS become ... contraction.
Surely that is OK ?
Love Alan Sure it is okay Alan if other people read it that way. My early grammar teachers pounded and pounded us about inanimate objects not having possesive case. Things cannot own anything. Similar argument is inanimate objects cannot love. Our informal usage has corrupted purity with time's, year's, etc.
On the other hand they did not object to "its," which is pronoun for an inanimate object.
When should I begin reading "time's" as " time has?"
:) Time for me to go back to contraction school? :)
Thanks for the correction, Alan. I will stand and sit corrected.
Don
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Eisa Faded Layers Feb 26 04, 04:53 Dear Snow,
This is quite beautiful, in it's m... Feb 26 04, 17:10 Zeus² Snow,
A metaphorical lookiing back and how time ha... Feb 26 04, 17:12 Pygmalion hi snow,
i quite agree with my fellow poets. i l... Feb 26 04, 18:42 Eisa QUOTE(Alan @ Feb. 26 2004, 16:10)Dear Snow,
... Feb 29 04, 17:54 Eisa QUOTE(Zeus² @ Feb. 26 2004, 16:12)Snow,
A met... Feb 29 04, 17:57 Eisa QUOTE(Pygmalion @ Feb. 26 2004, 17:42)
QUO... Feb 29 04, 18:44 Athena EXQUISITELY contructed and achieved, Snow!... Mar 1 04, 05:31 Eisa QUOTE(Athena @ Mar. 01 2004, 04:31)EXQUISITEL... Mar 4 04, 19:25 Siren WOW!
I'm speechless Snow. I have written ... Mar 17 04, 03:25 Eisa QUOTE(Siren @ Mar. 17 2004, 02:25)WOW!
I... Mar 19 04, 09:12 Don Hi Snow, aka Eisa,
Your iambs are nice and tight.... Apr 10 04, 14:11 Dear Don,
It's NOT possessive !
I frown ... Apr 11 04, 16:36 Dear Don,
Wow, a great 0600 start to the day with... Apr 12 04, 00:29 Don Its now 0830 here Alan.
Language changes due to u... Apr 12 04, 07:29 Dear Don,
My, we certainly seem to be stirring th... Apr 12 04, 08:57 Don Alan, I am reading The Chicago Manual of Style reg... Apr 12 04, 09:20 Dear Don,
"A toast to grammarians everywhere. ... Apr 12 04, 11:52 Eisa Hi there guys
My poem seems to have sparked of... Apr 13 04, 16:54 Cleo_Serapis Hi Snow! :sun:
I find this piece well craf... Apr 13 04, 17:53 Dear Snow,
Forgive our taking up your poem space,... Apr 13 04, 18:20 Don Hi Snow,
I sincerely apologize for consuming your... Apr 14 04, 06:10 Eisa QUOTE(Cleo_Serapis @ April 13 2004, 17:53)Hi ... Apr 20 04, 04:18 Eisa QUOTE(Alan @ April 13 2004, 18:20)Dear Snow,
... Apr 20 04, 04:27 Eisa QUOTE(Don @ April 14 2004, 06:10)Hi Snow,
I ... Apr 20 04, 04:34
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