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[Ali zonak]

Hi all!

Oh Gad, this site is nearly dead,
yet sweeter than the one I’d fled;
I must lament Australia Times
that often rang this poet’s chimes.
To Maureen fond wishes I extend—
though incognito, yet as friend.
I want to greet you, noble band,
as I return from foreign land,
i.g. a site that (to me) is dead.

[Larry]

Hi Ali,

To clarify my tiny nits: I never said your "Short Rondeau" was completely flawed or that the whole piece was not in tetrameter. Lines 5 and 9 are the only ones which diverge from true i.t. and are 4 1/2 feet in length. You are correct when stating a feminine ending is permissible and is often employed by many writers. I didn't want to get into a full critique of your piece but will mention that your "Short Rondeau" has the rhyme scheme of the classic "Rondeau" i.e. aa, bb, etc. where the noted rhyme scheme of the "Short Rondeau" is ab, ab, cd, ca (or R) and line 6 should rhyme with the portion of line 1 which is the refrain. The "Short Rondeau" is also only 8 lines long but then, again, different strokes for different folks.

I didn't mean for my comments to bite you on the caboose. Changes in form are inevitable and, in fact, are done quite often here at MM. Feel free to come up with new forms or an admixture of known forms any time you wish.

Thanks for coming to join our happy band and I hope you didn't take umbrage with what I have said.

Larry