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 Feb 17 17, 22:06
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 11,430 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in.  |
Man – Kind?
A man, empty inside, but outward mien belies the fact that soul and heart are scarred by life’s experience and what was seen so long ago when nation’s children warred for reasons, yet unknown. Much like today, where youth is wasted in some foreign land and leaders of the world have naught to say. I feel it’s time for peace and love; demand to know why some would lead us down that path while death, disease and sickness seem ignored. Take heed of those instead of greed and wrath for this small world is dying by the sword. New Edens wait upon a spectral shore where waves of peace may susurrate once more. ·······  ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner       |
  
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Feb 18 17, 16:02
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
OOOh Larry!
 I love this! I get very sad when I think of how our young men and women enlist (my man did so many years ago) right out of high school - and then I feel their deeds to protect us (and others in the call of duty) are not acknowledged as they should be! They risk their lives and how do we repay them? Well, I do not want to get into my own thoughts, but let's just say this poem is spot on to reflect my own feelings. My only nit is in the opening line - the meter (at least how I pronounce) "A man, empty inside" doesn't seem to flow quite as smoothly as the rest. Enjoyed the read very much!  ~Cleo 
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
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Larry Man - Kind? Feb 17 17, 22:06 
JustDaniel Dear Larry,
please do not think I think your wri... Feb 18 17, 08:57 Larry Hi Lori,
Thanks for stopping by for a read and I... Feb 20 17, 09:21 Larry Hey Daniel,
I’m glad you prefaced your sonnet wit... Feb 22 17, 14:51 JustDaniel Hey, Larry...
I'm pleased that you didn't... Jul 6 17, 00:36 Ali zonak Larry,
your title is okay, but "Man - Unkind... Jul 6 17, 07:25 
Larry Hi Ali,
Thanks for the visit and your comments. ... Jul 6 17, 07:57 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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