The Warrior’s Return., William Shakespeare Snippets: November 9th, 2003 Options

[Rhymer]

As birds sit brooding, in the moon’s sphere,
their golden eyes and ears, tune in to faintly hear
the distant sights and sounds of happier men.
Phoebe, aware of her fading sweets, then
asks - is there more delight, within the heart,
than two lovers greeting after years apart?
Of sweet silent looks and unspoken word,
only the longing of a lover’s sigh is heard!
When true love bursts anew, in a mutual flame,
then shall he see, even as she calls his name,
the fierce longing within her passionate embrace!
Long denied, although he, from a distant place,
as his gold complexion did so clearly show,
had returned to claim the only love he would know!
At their parting, she had sworn to wait and be true,
and peace proclaims, this day: Life begins anew!

Rhymer. December 17th, 2016.

Snippets used in order: Birds sit brooding, in the moon’s sphere,
their golden eyes, and happier men, her fading sweets, is there more delight,
in the heart, in a mutual flame, shall he see, of sweet silent,
his gold complexion, and peace proclaims.

[Psyche]

Well, it didn't take you long to compose the answer to this challenge! I really like it. The opening lines are perfect to slowly introduce the reader to the real themes of the poem. Distance. Longing. Reunion. Love. Faithfulness.

IMO, this is one of your best. Pushing those brain cells to their limit is working splendidly for you! I do hope you stick around and share many more poems with us. They need not be challenges. Many members move their poems over to Plato's Pearls of Wisdom, where they are move visible to others. And it's not a workshop forum, no crits!

As birds sit brooding, in the moon’s sphere,
their golden eyes and ears, tune in to faintly hear
the distant sights and sounds of happier men.

Once again, have a happy, peaceful anniversary.
Best, Syl

[Rhymer]

Well, it didn't take you long to compose the answer to this challenge! I really like it. The opening lines are perfect to slowly introduce the reader to the real themes of the poem. Distance. Longing. Reunion. Love. Faithfulness.

IMO, this is one of your best. Pushing those brain cells to their limit is working splendidly for you! I do hope you stick around and share many more poems with us. They need not be challenges. Many members move their poems over to Plato's Pearls of Wisdom, where they are move visible to others. And it's not a workshop forum, no crits!

As birds sit brooding, in the moon’s sphere,
their golden eyes and ears, tune in to faintly hear
the distant sights and sounds of happier men.

Once again, have a happy, peaceful anniversary.
Best, Syl

Hi Syl. Thanks for your comment and support, which is always a `plus` in my book!

I think much of what I would say in response to yours is that at times, a thought will flash through my head - spawned or sponsored by a phrase or word, that sets the scene I would follow. So it happened with this. Perhaps, partly due to some of the phrases, imitating somewhat, a time in my own life, which turned out as my poem described.

My dear wife of 62 years - yesterday - and I had met only twice and that briefly - before I was sent overseas to the Far East - Korean War. 30 plus months later I returned, knowing full well, `She` was the one I wanted to be my wife. We had corresponded as pen pals throughout those months, and I had fallen in love with a young lady who was nothing more than a `picture` in my mind!

I am one who firmly believes that the words we use, when writing, no matter what the `piece` might be! Is a .window to their soul! I am seldom mistaken, if I can read, letters, poems, or whatever is written. I have always held the firm belief, that words are tantamount to body language which most of us can understand, when talking with someone face to face! On our third meeting - I kid you not, despite there being an almost 3 year gap between our second and third meetings - I was even more convinced she was the perfect `one` for me, and I proposed! And so my `feelings` have since been proven. End of story except for 62 years of wedded bliss and hopefully, more to come!

Perhaps more of my reply to Larry might be found as apropos as well.

For now, enjoy your day. Fondest regards. Denis aka Rhymer.