Wordsworth's "I Wandered..." Restated Challenge, Line ending words must be repeated Options

[jgdittier]

Behold the sky without a CLOUD,
Let clement air caress the HILLS,
As then was I who eyed a CROWD,
A dale of dainty DAFFODILS:
Before the beach, beyond the TREES,
Beckoning to me with the BREEZE

An auric acre of awesome SHINE
In matrix like the milky WAY,
A burst of beauty, none in LINE
With sea of sun along the BAY:
No way could I but give a GLANCE,
Winking and wagging in dainty DANCE.

How like the waves, these posies, THEY
will bow and bid in sharing GLEE:
What words would fail to gush with GAY
In green and yellow COMPANY:
I stood amazed, without a THOUGHT
And then thanked God for what He BROUGHT.

And now, as I'm abed and LIE
With peace and piety, my MOOD'
I see them with my mindful EYE
who join me in my SOLITUDE;
Then once again my mem'ry FILLS
and I'm amongst those DAFFODILS.

(to read Wordsworth's "I Wandered Lonely as a Cloud", righr here it Mosaic Musings, go to
Legendary Libations, William Wordsworth, posted by Cleo.

[JustDaniel]

Thanks for reviving this, Alan. I'll look further at your post in the Crits!!

Here's my attempt:

Today it's Rainier

I wonder at the lonely cloud
that's floating east toward the hills.
Just yesterday there was a crowd
of them that wet the daffodils
and filled the lakes and slaked the trees.
Today there's but a warming breeze.

It's joy to see Mt Rainier shine
where billows have since gone away.
The foothills form a wondrous line
that yesterday kept clouds at bay.
Today snow peaks can't miss your glance,
and circling hawks all seem to dance.

Red robins find their prey, and they
are feeding all their kin with glee.
Seems all the animals are gay
and keep each other company.
Such pleasure in this day, I thought.
Could anything more peace have brought?

I've nothing more to do than lie
on dewy grass and share the mood.
The cloud will morph before my eyes
as I lounge here in solitude.
Puyallup Valley always fills
my heart... and fields with daffodils.

© MLee Dickens'son 2014

reflecting back on my roots in Tacoma, WA

Source of the challenge: Use the last words of each line of Wordsworth's poem:

I Wandered Lonely as a Cloud
By William Wordsworth

I wandered lonely as a cloud
That floats on high o'er vales and hills,
When all at once I saw a crowd,
A host, of golden daffodils;
Beside the lake, beneath the trees,
Fluttering and dancing in the breeze.

Continuous as the stars that shine
And twinkle on the milky way,
They stretched in never-ending line
Along the margin of a bay:
Ten thousand saw I at a glance,
Tossing their heads in sprightly dance.

The waves beside them danced; but they
Out-did the sparkling waves in glee:
A poet could not but be gay,
In such a jocund company:
I gazed—and gazed—but little thought
What wealth the show to me had brought:

For oft, when on my couch I lie
In vacant or in pensive mood,
They flash upon that inward eye
Which is the bliss of solitude;
And then my heart with pleasure fills,
And dances with the daffodils.